a wrecking crew
demolishes lives
with lies
some
moments'
pleasure
watch it
all
fall down
A contest entry
- Adultery by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 17, 2008, 15 entries
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Visual for a short verse.
Love,
Amera
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Just how I meant it to be, Sis.
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sigh ... yeah
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aaawww honey
This wasn't meant to be a poem designed to depress anyone - it was a response to a picture showing an overturned room. Bad things do happen in people's lives, and we move on as best we can.
It's like the "death" card in the Tarot pack which, according to scholars of that form of divination, does not necessarily mean an absolute end, but a clearing away of things, revealing a new direction.
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Very good
Having been there I'd say you hit the nail on the head. Brought back feelings that I thought were gone.
Good job,
Eyec
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Thanks. This was a spur-of-the-moment poem, typed straight into the box here. I didn't even keep a copy. It isn't a "nice" poem to read, but I am both glad and sorry that it resonated.
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A creative and intense take on the picture... x
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You've cut to the quick of the chase here--well done.
Bill
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I saw the chaos in the photo, and thought "A great big wrecking ball has just swung through a bunch of lives here, in mid-pleasure". That's how it struck me.
M
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Ouch !!
What a way to go .... a lifetime's regret for a moment's pleasure. I love your play on words ...watch it fall down ..... bit cruel and sadistic don't you thinK ???
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Yep - that's me.
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