..........Intense..
..Feeling the rush..
Blood pumping..
..breath in deep..
...always falling..
...Never stop..
the tears
Author notes
15 poets
15 words
Prompt ~ persistent
Words:15
A contest entry
- single word prompt by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 17, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
simple
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awesome! a lot said in 15 words hun. i relate to this too! (what dont i relate to??? lol)
cuz
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pain pain go away! Unfortunately wont go... i know the feeling welcome to my world
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great write I hope you do well in contest..
to me its like cutting.... its emotional and intense... which is what cutting is...
sorry im rammbling i just never know what to say when all i want to say is i really liked it.. i dont know if what i got from it is what you meant if not sorry... hugs...
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Totally riveting and intense... x
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Thank you very much.. good luck judging..
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awwwwwwwww painful heart ache.
kick him in the shins to start with.
love should not cause tears.
success in this contest.
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haha.. thanks I just might do that, and then run..lol..Love should never cause tears unless they give you joy..thank you for your kind comment..
J.
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cool, girlie. i liked how i had no idea what was coming until the end. i mean, i had no idea what this was leading to...made me go back to it and read it again in another light. i like it when poems make you WANT to read it again!
rianna
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Hey you!.. I'm glad that you liked it.. I didn't really know what I was trying to say here..lol.. It all just ... came out, I guess you could say.. But yeah I like poems that make you do that too.. I do that a lot with one of my ap family members stuff. he's really good.. anyway thank for the comment!
Jetleena
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Can I slow down now (lol)?
Great job poetess. I felt "rushed". Good word-play. You successfully managed to space the wording right and add to this, that urgent-feel...very good idea here. Very good job. Congrats and good luck in the contest.
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I read alot into this. It seems to have a few meaning of either a joyful intesity which brings about tears....or something very hurtful! Either way, it turned out very beautiful and full of emotion. Excellent job and good luck!
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There is nothing wrong with falling. Only what you are falling into can decide that. God job dear friend.
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awwww wow, wonderful job
this isnt suxxy
good luck
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haha.. Well that was going to be the title.. but then I thought that people wouldn't want to read it because the title was stupid..lol.. I'm glad you liked it..
Jetleena
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Wicked take on the prompt. Love the words, sorrow filled piece. Good luck in the contest with it
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Hey! thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it..I'm not used to keeping things small..lol.. Glad to see your still here..(no bite marks from little nibbles I hope lol..)anyway again thank you..
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Excellent
What a great take on this prompt. you continue to impress me with your words.
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wow
very intense and emotional. Great job sweetie. I know a lot about non stop tears. Love you beautiful, Daddy
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goodluck =)
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haha.. thanks.
hope the boogie man does come today..
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