Feeling like this
I know it can't be right
The memories I have of you
I hold on to so tight
I keep you in my heart
The place you should be
I locked you up inside
And threw away the key
No matter where you are
Or where you tend to go
You will always be with me
Our love will always grow
A contest entry
- Poems about Loss and Grief - Number 2 by Judith Chandler.
300 points, ended May 29, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options! Prewrites accepted. by after-silence.
900 points, ended July 14, 2008, 21 entries
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The simplicity is touching. The second stanza feels awkward because the verb tenses don't line up; you might want to consider changing that. Anyway, this is a very beautiful and moving poem. Thank you for entering!
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Loss of a love, I take it. Not a bad write but the tenses in the second stanza are mixed up. Should be "I kept you" to be consistent with past tense in the 3rd and 4th line or 3rd and 4th line should read "I lock you up...And throw away..."
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So sad, but when you lose someone they are always there, which is a nice thought to have. I love this alot! x
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This is very heartfelt and a lovely lovely rhyme Well done dear
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Very touching and deeply felt...love never dies even when the one we love is not near...lovely flow and meaning...very touching...thank you for sharing.
Best,
mystic
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that is so sweet, a touching moment whilst reading. you really do have a way with words. i think you could possibly be one of the best poets on my favourite's list.
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