(I won’t hold back…)
“It’s forbidden…
According to heaven
To love someone like you
A mortal who has nothing good to do
I became a deviant in heaven above
Yearning for none but only for your love
Dreaming of lust and sweet desire
Wishing to leave my creator’s empire”
(And you said…)
“Sweet angel from skies above
Dry them eyes my precious dove
I may be the son of an evil
My heart is darkened, but I know what I feel
I’m ready to face the madness of heaven
Take all the consequences till I can
I will give you your own empire
Give you mortal love your heart desire”
(I need not think twice…)
“MY creator said I was created to give guidance
To watch over little souls that needed a chance
I wasn’t created to fall for a mortal who has darkened soul
I wasn’t created to give my all…
But, I can no longer hide
The love I have for you inside
So I stripped off my angel’s wings
And willingly gave up my heavenly things
I’m ready to fly away
To leave the bright of the day
From heaven in your arms where I fell
With you in your forbidden land where I chose to dwell
And I don’t regret…
Will never regret…”
Author notes
i'm not so sure about this...
but feel free to give the hardest shot
*it comes and it goes*
A contest entry
- Demon Angel by nuttynettles.
399 points, ended April 19, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the bronze!
Wow you really did a great job with the prompt. I love the style of this, the flow and rhyme are superb. Congrats on the trophy
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I love this...its such a beautiful tale and put together really well, you did well with the rhyme (you've been doing more of that recently) and I think you have taken the prompt and described it excellently.
I was grabbed from the start and ended up reading it at least three times before I commented; a tender tale, if a little sad (for things left behind), thank you for posting it where I and other's can read.
Good luck in the contest, I am sure you will get something with this one.
Adrian
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WarrioroftheHeart
thank you adrian for checking out my poem.
yea i lost my muse, but i'm trying to gain it back...
shoot before i can get it all back the price i have to pay is friggin huge! hehehe
nyways thank you again... for wishing me luck and for reading...
hug hug hug
ti
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wow
that was amazing! absolutely beautiful!!
good luck!
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interseting! does mortal love have so much power, really? i never thought so. but reading your poem, i might now have a more positive look towards mortal love. the poem reads greats and concept of prsentation is outstanding. Well done
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Sweet and satisfying. Forbidden love brought the flood to wipe out the nephilim, the off spring of angels and women. I really dig this.
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