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Our Moment

Under the moonlight
we connect our lusty lips
to start our moment

A contest entry

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  • Odd Thomas
    April 16, 2008

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    very excellent haiku, although you dont need to capitalize, you also dont need te word lusty, in haiku you try to use as less possible words as possible, besides that, this is great, thank you for entering and good luck in the contest


    • Rockstar Bob
      April 16, 2008
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      I thought "lusty" fit in well. I wrote this intending to make a series that I'll soon label as adult.