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Flawless

Appealing to the senses;
rocking the barriers of mind.
Painted picture within its words.
A thing of beauty that sets the soul
aflame with all its wonder.

Perfect in its creation
as the murky-black teller of tales
races across the usual medium
for placing stories to tell.

Lighted words that carry such weight.
Perfect wording never to harsh
and never so soft as to matter no longer.
Carries not only a message,
but also an image, whatever it shall be.

Created through thoughts,
and a few worldly tools.
If one could, it would simply jump
from mind to mind;
never touch the world,
to be soiled by humanity.
Thus we shall never see
this thing of wonder and no flaws,
one may always dream though.
One may always pray,
for this instrument of
a flawless design.

Author notes

Promt. "An instrument of flawless design."


Well... if you paid any attention at all, you know what the promt was. Sooo... any guesses on the "instrument" I created? Well...? Hehe. I actually had fun, I described the creation to (drumroll please)...... a flawless poem.

FYI. Murky-Black Teller of Tales = Pen
and
Usual Medium = Paper.

(Ps. Does a poem count as an instrument. I hope it does. It does to me. I consider an instrument to be anything useful. And poetry is useful me to.)



~For something else. This is my favorite poem I have written. I don't know why. It just is. Hope you like it too. I think I'd like to be a Guardian Listener. Just sounds cool. Plus I love to listen. ~

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  • whatami
    April 23, 2008

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    flawless is like an eternity away. 'we may always dream though' , i like that line. yea, verse two brought a written 'melody' to mind. great, nice metaphors.


  • GypsyEyes
    April 22, 2008

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    this was pretty-ful!! yay!! i really liked it! i think that it counts!! but thats my opinion! one question? what do you want to be in my family? thank you for wanting to be apart of my family!!
    ~NeeCee


    • Simply Simple
      April 22, 2008
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      I added it. I guess you missed it. That's okay. I want to be "Guardian Listener."


  • Naridill
    April 22, 2008

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    Little too obvious with mentioning the prompt in poem - but apart from that, the style - simple but straight. The flow works through with the imagery as well.

  • poetrytoopeneyes
    April 16, 2008

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    Oooo, I guessed that one! Haha, Yeah, I also consider a poem to be an instrument. This was really kewl and descriptive.


    • Simply Simple
      April 16, 2008

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      Yay! I guess I did good if you could guess it. Or does that mean I did bad? Haha. Glad to know someone else did too. Thanks. I tried. (These rounds contests are hard. I was suprised to make it passed the first one. Let alone this far. And Sulfane is a pretty harsh judge.)

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