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[ Cheers to a world of ]

Cheers to a world of
Deers in headlights.
A nation raising

Beers to peers
Who think they
Are doing well.

When the blood
Went up over
through the

Windshield

The bad sci-fi
Writers were
right, at least

About the headchips,
Beta programs for
computing power

Beyond the wires
pulling out
through the

Skin.

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  • Punzel
    April 17, 2008

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    Damn, that rocks. I like how you say "deers" even though it's grammatically incorrect but it works perfect with the poem.

    • AaronReed
      April 23, 2008
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      Yeah, I am all about the gramatics being incorrect. To distance yourself from the rules of grammer (which requires a knowledge of the rules) shows a distance the subject has from the reader who is aware of the rules. Of course, it is usually good for the poet to make the audience aware that it is on purpose.


  • Tattboyspet
    April 17, 2008
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    20 words???????

    • AaronReed
      April 23, 2008
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      Sorry, I missed that rule. I was just looking for a contest that fit what I wanted to write about and I must have over looked that rule in my excitement.