Comfort from the world
Always relaxing
Nestled deep under the bubbles
Dreaming of fantasies
Lonesome is a great feeling
Embracing my heart to the core
Lavender scented candles burn on the counter
Imagining the bubbles will never fade away
Gently washing my body
Hot water flowing across my skin
Taming the pain I have within
Bubbles of lilac scent
Across my chest
Touching my soul
Hair flowing in the water
Simple things, make my life worth living
Author notes
candlelight baths (my spice of life acrostic contest)
i have learned to love acrostics now!!
A contest entry
- Daily Contest PIF (Acrostics) ((Ohno, Not Again!!!)) by JinSays.
300 points, ended April 16, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Peaceful Easy Feeling by davidwright.
600 points, ended June 15, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cheer me up Prewrites and multiple entries allowed by crazymomma.
550 points, ended July 14, 2008, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tired of HM's? (I) by PatheticKt.
525 points, ended August 11, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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It's nice that people are discovering classic form poetry. Acrostic is one of them and I never get tired of that
You should try a Shadow one, it's challenging and worthy when the task is done with justice 
Anyway, I miss these kind of baths since it's been a very long time. I like how you let the reader pull into the scene that's set in this poem and every detail gave a nice touch for the reader's sense of, well, touch and the poem's structure as well
You've got some spellcheck to do, though with the 8th line: it should be will and the 12th line should be scent ~
Overall, a lovely poem this is, all right
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spell check is fixed, and i have wrote many shadow acrostics too
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Good edit ^^ Wait, you did many?
I only did two
Form poetry is fun, hehe
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The words chosen here made me feel calm to say the least. I never thought a poem could make me feel relaxed until now. I really want to go take a bubble bath. Thanks for entering
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A chilled glass of white wine would greatly enhance the setting. A fine piece of work depicting that peaceful easyfeeling. Thanks for the entry and happy trails.
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This is one of those "little things" in life to which I so often referr to. Those things that we need to take time to enjoy because life passes us up so quickly. Great write and keep up the great work
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Wow that sounds super nice. Can I borrow some of that lavender stuff? LOL you made me want to go take a bath!
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I would love a candlelight bath but I can't light candles in my place. I think you have a typo. Just a small one, "touching my sole" sole shoul be soul.
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Very nice...but I can't take a bath without something to read!
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Nice
I love bubble baths, too!
And the scent of lilacs, and burnign candles.
I like the last line- Simple things make life worth living. Good job!
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ah, the joy of bubble baths.
"Gently washing my body
Hot water flowing across my skin
Taming the pain I have within"
great work. -
Lovely.
Yeah, I love acrostics too. You did a beautiful job, and I thank you.
Peace,
Jin
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