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You broke my heart
The pain never ceases
Everytime i breath
I think of you
Everytime i cough
I think of you
Everytime I see....
You.

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  • Angelflower
    April 17, 2008

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    Awww. this was so simple yet it had so much emotion in it.. I really liked it.. Well done..
    Jetleena


  • DawnKestrel
    April 17, 2008

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    I like how you've repeated 'I think of you', sfter you've written 'Everytime I ...'
    I like how the last line is just one word, 'you'.