Skin all cracked, torn and frayed
limbs gangly about your body -
a soft smile, touching your
ageless lips
a bright twinkle in your
ever-blue eyes
hanging from your body
patched and mended -
the same pair of
old blue-jean overalls
you always wear -
in my presence.
Your fingers are like
twisting brown branches
the deep groves of
weather torn wrinkles
cracked nails, like dead
leaves – about to fall.
Oh. Grandfather -
your hair a mass of graying
stems, amass your head.
Your body, undetectable
underneath your oversized
overalls.
Thin as a rail – your spine
bent over, hunched towards
the ground.
Where your long arms drag
thick branches of dying leaves
upon the earthen soil beneath.
But, 'ol grandfather tree
you are the same
grandfather, to me.
Humming away
racetime tunes...
snapping your
cracking knuckles -
where buds cease to grow.
The cool winds – hitting you
harshly,
But, Grandfather -
I will protect you,
as the seasons
wear on.
Author notes
Will eventually get to writing this.
It's a tree that thrives by my house, Every time I look at it.. I see an old man, so I have taken to calling it the Grandfather tree...
it's so inspiring...
It's so lovely...
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. So very expressive. Best of luck in the contest
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Great poem..nice:
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I liked how you compared a grandfather to a tree because in some ways, they both can be similar. I also like the really nice imagery here, it was very clear that you put a lot of time and effort into this.
Good job,
~Erin
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Very Good.
I really liked the metaphor between frail humanity and a leafless tree. Beautiful.
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Well executed and beautiful in its description. But I was bored before I got to the end. I've read similar poems all over this site.
But I'm an arrogant jack-ass who finds more splendor in destruction than in beauty, and more peace in mortality than long life and good health. Probably your antithesis.
But you have amazing descriptive abilities. You can break free from the fashion poetry and create something with a gnarled beauty, if you'd just step out of your comfort zone. I know I shouldn't be criticizing you so harshly, but I can see things as they could be, and I don't like them as they are. But applause for your talent.
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clever clever concept... I really digged the whole metaphor... It was really powerful. What I liked especially is how it is linked to your life... Well done
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this is amazing how u use the words to make it seem so alive like it was right there i could just reach out and touch it
Thanks For Entering
~Mystal~
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It does look like an old man...I am sure one can come up with a lovely write for this!
Clappies for the old man still standing!
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you are definitly right!i love this tree though its very beautiful and thanks for commenting on mine..im looking forward to hearing your feelings about this.
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Amazing Tree
Amazing tree.
I'm looking forward, also, to hearing your feelings and thoughts about the Grandfather Tree.
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Beautiful picture... I look forward to hearing your feelings about it...
Ken
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