If I ran away
how many people would stay
or would anyone even know
that I was forever gone
I needed to say so much
but I keep it all to myself
I knew how it would turn out
I knew it wouldnt work
I tryed to save our relationship
Oh how I really tryed
to save it all
but I guess we will never really know
So why does your touch still upset me
when its been over for so long
and when i see your lovely smile
I really just want to cry
If I ran away
would you even care that I was gone
You probably wouldnt even notice it
So how long must it go
before anyone can know
that inside i was dying
and I forever closed my eyes
saying good-bye was the hardest
and thats why i didnt do it
so just to let you know
I always loved you so
and if i ran away
would you have even missed me?
Author notes
This is for the closest person in my life...if anyone knows who that truely is...I love you...and I'm sorry!
Mylee
A contest entry
- I'm alone......are you? by movedon.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 103 entries
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thanks for fixing.
thats great. -
You have 24 hours to re-read my poem and fix your AN. Otherwise, it will result in an automatic DQ.
This is a great write, and I'm sure the person you write this for was very flattered. Tahnks for taking the time to enter. I enjoyed reading this.
ing alone,
Mylee -
If I ran away
how many people would stay
or would anyone even know
that I was forever gone
I needed to say so much
but I keep it all to myself
I knew how it would turn out
I knew it wouldnt work
I tryed to save our relationship
Oh how I really tryed
to save it all
but I guess we will never really know
So why does your touch still upset me
when its been over for so long
and when i see your lovely smile
I really just want to cry
If I ran away
would you even care that I was gone
You probably wouldnt even notice it
So how long must it go
before anyone can know
that inside i was dying
and I forever closed my eyes
saying good-bye was the hardest
and thats why i didnt do it
so just to let you know
I always loved you so
and if i ran away
would you have even missed me?
(this is my favorite part)
hahaha the whole thing is
This is very good you can always express yourself so good.
In every poem you have ever wrote you express yourself better than almost anyone's poem's i have ever read befor
BRAVO!!!!!
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I love the line:if i ran away, i love the way u wrote this poem wow! check mine out x x x
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Awww, this is sweet but sad at the same time. I hope things get better for you.
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