In my hand here I hold
my life that I must mold.
I made it perfect and I made it round
it was in a peaceful state without an evil sound.
Then, you came right in
and you exposed me to the worst kind of sin,
taking away all things I held dear
and now, I see it is you that I fear.
You’ve broken the clay –
my will you’ve taken away.
Such hate – you put in the cracks
as if my clay was punctured by a dozen tiny tacks.
Heartbreak now shows through
but through it all; I’ve gotten over you.
Another man has come
and wrapped me so tightly around his thumb,
it scares me to know
that with him is where I want to go.
He says he loves me not
and yet I know my clay loves him with all its got,
so why do I sit here still and ponder…
oh, my mind will always wander.
I love this man, I love him so.
Oh how I wish to love he wouldn’t demand “no.”
Author notes
BrittyLynne
Idk what my reason behind this was... you said anything goes so I just sat down and spilled what I felt Hope you like it!
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- Anything goes ♥ [READ THE ONE RULE!]--Extended by She Stole My Voice.
300 points, ended May 2, 2008, 19 entries
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ok, your a pretty good writer, i am glad i came across you. I look forward to reading more, this poem's flow is badass! good job
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A perfect woorld--molded like clay--tillit was broken by sin. Such vivd lines!! I love the analogy--our lifes to clay.
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Aww thanks!
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Great metaphor. I've been in the same boat. But if the second guy doesn't love you, you should muster up the strength to move on from him as well. Well done.
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I do like it :]
Except the rhyme,
but it flows well.
Thank you for entering
and good luck in my contest!
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Its a really good poem Britty. I take it the first guy mentioned was you ex fiance. The second guy doesnt seem to deserve you. You could do better than him. But you love him. IDK whats wrong with him but he will come around or you should move on.
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this is good... but i know that it has something to do with a or d... or, at least i think so... so which one is it??
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