Riding a sharp, curt wind
That is most frigid
I watch the unawares scurry by
Keeping their heads low
And their eyes fixed
They feel it
They don’t know what “it” is
It’s just a gnawing
In the back of the skull
That’s quiet, elusive, and cold
Yet still induces
A look over their shoulders
It’s a viral evil that spreads
Like the grin across my face
As I sit alone on the park bench
Resonating in the rising warmth
Inside of me
I feel it too
But I feel it because I made it
The corrupt scientist
Eyeing the toxic syringe
With glowing adoration
I feel it again
As the shiny satellites
Whirl through myriad exposures
The eye of the sky
That sees all
And nothing
Oblivious
It whisks away
As I close my eyes
I am the chill in the wind
I am the great destroyer
Author notes
inspired from 'The Great Destroyer' by Nine Inch Nails, from their album 'Year Zero'.
A contest entry
- I just made you up, to hurt myself ♥ (NIN inspired) by Lauren Noir.
925 points, ended May 4, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I liked how you added the title at the end.
The poem was a description, and you closed it wonderfully. It was just done so well.
Everything you wrote was amazing, you used words and made them amazing (like Trent himself)
I know that you were working on the words, but the structure could have been better. I was just a poem running down the edge, It needed a bit of structure.
But still, everything that you wrote was perfect
Well done
good luck
And thank you
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