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awaken the beast existential

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this powerful beast...

 

as she is resting at peace, is the power you have locked inside

 

it's only resting serene...

 

its great power unseen, the key is to swallow your pride

 

an unfathomed potential and sovereign truth

 

the crystalline intention of a spiritual youth

 

 

Eternal strength...

 

it's a representation of all we can be

if we awaken our connection to divinity

honesty unfolds, as does potential

forget not your spirit, it is existential 

 

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reworked feb,16/09 - go here for image http://allpoetry.com/contest/2400703

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  • Dragonbabyx3
    May 29

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    You did an excellent job on this! The rhyme was just enough, without going overboard, it was easy to read, and yet deep as could be. I loved it! Great work sweetie!


  • teddybare gold member
    May 26
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    you comment so fast... lol

    while i amso so glad you like reading me ... youre hard to keep up with in the comment department.. lol which is awesome.. did you go look at the pic? the pic that prompted this write is a 1000 word poem in its self..

    anyway you freakin rock girl


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    May 25

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    oooh, this is tasty
    What always amazes me about your work, and erm lets face it, I have read a bit of it,
    is that you never get stagnent, or pigeon holed.
    This one has such a tight little rhythm, n I love nice tight rhythms, its complete joy to my tongue, its sumptious read outloud, I just read it to my son, it sounds great

    This powerful beast, as she's resting at peace, is the power you have locked up inside

    Oh my, do you even have any idea how powerfully good you are, this is wonderful in its entirity.

    And the message behind it is wonderully liberating
    Everyone should read this

    N ice write my friend in poetry

  • Mercury Rising
    May 12

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    An excellent spiritual and earth-centered piece with some very fine imagery of transformation. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.


  • Gypsy Dancer
    March 23

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    Beautiful

    All your poems are so wonderful, its almost hard to find one to comment they have all been so commented on. The first one I read was my favorite. But I like this one to.

    This one makes look towards the hope of my future. The beauty and suggestive power in my dreams. One thing can lead to another and all of sudden you have everything you ever wanted.

    "the crystaline intention of a spiritual youth" that line sent shivers of gold down my back.

    Beatiful.

    • teddybare gold member
      May 7
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      thank you beautiful...

      i do believe that "the crystaline intention of a spiritual youth" is going to be key in the transformation of human conscience. a transformation that will be required in order to evolve when Gaia (mother earth) evolves. if we are not ready well...


      lol anyway thanks for commenting you've left me many comments and i am trying to catch up


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    February 18

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    This exposes a truth many choose to hide from. All we are and ever will be is held within us.
    Excellent write.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 22, 2008
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    Well for on the fly its a great piece! An intense piece, beautifully penned


  • Kari gold member
    April 17, 2008

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    Oh wow! This was just really beautiful! It's amazing what can happen when we embrace such wonderful things.
    A lot of people have a hard time swallowing pride...
    This was really thought provoking, powerful, and stunning.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    I like the strength in this write!! Great metaphor also!!
    Yes, sorry over the word limit, but like the poem regardless!
    Thanks for the entry

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