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But am I good enough?

Light a hundred candles,
And watch them as they burn,
Now close those eyes,
And let me take my turn,
As I trace your jawline,
With a single kiss,
Your body next to mine,
Is unrivaled bliss,
Skin on skin as we gently caress,
If this were a torture,
I'd already confess,
I see your face,
In the candle light,
And I hope you'll last the whole night,
Gentle biting on her neck,
Working down to her chest,
She utters a sigh and says I'm the best,
Her hips move and I can feel what they're saying,
Swaying,
As I kiss her black lips,
But am I good enough?
Am I good enough for you?

Your turn now as you take the lead
Seeing to my every need,
Pour up some more red wine,
And leave a black mark on the glass,
Hours to come and they pass,
As the silky sheets invite us to stay,
Adding seduction to the game we play,
One by one the candles flicker and die,
We open up the curtains and watch the night sky,
May I light your cigarette?
Many years ago we met,
But am I good enough?
Am I good enough for you?
Let me love you,
And I'll let you love me.

Author notes

my username is shadowskill, this poem just popped out of nowhere but is mainly powered by feelings i had shared with someone special

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  • limechic
    August 30, 2008

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    Great rhyming, I love the darkness in it...I think the commas are unnecessary though; they take away from the words a bit.

    Great job, good luck!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 10, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • LoveDroveMeCrazy4U
    July 4, 2008

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    Wow

    This was very sensual and nice... The flow was superb! I really liked how you describe the situation with such information and then you add in doubts of whether you're good enough or not... masterful! I really realy love this! I found nothing that I would try to change or reword in it it was just....I don't know... amazing just doesn't fully cover it!

    keep up the wonderful work!
    <3 LDMC4U

    masterful!


  • crystallynnbradford
    June 18, 2008

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    this is awesome! everything in this piece is just done so well, that I hardly can leave a comment! The imagery, the flow, the emotion....awesome!

  • luv2dream gold member
    May 28, 2008
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    I love this! Flowed so nicely and great imagery!!Pulled me in!
    Thanks!!


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    This is such a beautiful sensual, romantic poem. It was such a pleasure to read. I really loved the last two lines, well done and all the best for the contest.


  • reymysterio
    May 26, 2008
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    great its outsanding well done great job


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 7, 2008
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    Very alluringly sensual piece. Thanks for the great entry. Hugs, Bunny


  • Perception
    April 16, 2008

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    ooo... wow... this is great... sensual... loving... deep... wonderful poem

    Really enjoyed

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