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Dreadful past

I'm torn apart
From my past behind
I have dreaful memories
As you'll find

A unloving mother
A sexual assult past
A love that was lost
That i thought would last

Sometimes i'm sad
Just deep in thought
Just thinking of life
And what it's brought

I haide inside
Not letting it show
I'm speaking out
I'm gona let me show

I show my angewr
I show i'm sad
But all i want
Is to be happy and glad

I'm forgetting my past
Some it will depwnd
But without my friends
My life would end

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  • Sound of Madness
    June 9, 2008

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    If it wasn't for my friends I'd most likely still be cutting myself, or dead. Friends mean the world to me, and I cherish ever one that I have. Nice work.


  • Lagrimas
    May 13, 2008

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    Understanding the ideas

    I understand what you are trying to say, but I was wondering if you might want to ask a friend to proof read for you. I see that you are doing the four lines and rhyming. I think that in some cases there are better words for rhyming that would more clearly express what you are trying to say. If you would like I wouldn't mind helping as I have time. If not than I totally understand. Whatever the case I understand what you are trying to express and praise your efforts.