I remember getting the news,
They told me she was dead;
An accident had took her life,
For her no tears I'd shed.
We couldn't get along,
All we did was fight;
Not always that way,
It began that summer night.
What we did was wrong,
We knew it wasn't right;
We did what we wanted,
This end was not in sight.
That's when your life began,
A result of what we'd done;
Because of our decision,
I was gonna have a son.
I remember when your mother,
Told me about you;
And also when she told me,
The day that you were due.
But life's not always fair,
You weren't meant to be;
The accident that took her life
Took you away from me.
Through my tears I write this,
Its hard for me to say;
But when I get to heaven,
I'll see you on that day.
Author notes
This poem was written about about my son that was never born. His mother who I had broken up with before I found out she as pregnant died in a car accident when she was 5 months pregnant. She had just told me the day before that it was gonna be a boy. We had even talked about it and decided on a name. Derrik Allen and we were trying to decide if he was gonna have my last name or not. He would have been born May 6th 2006. The photo is me with a friend's son. Taken in August of 2007 by my friends dad. It was written December 3rd 2007.
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Comments
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this is a stunning and touching write. I reallydnt know what to say. you involved such raw emotion and the simple effective language and style that you used to describe this tragedy is breathtaking.
I love how you ended the poem.
Thankyou for entering
All the best
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Thank you and you definatly made the right decisions with the contest. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
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this is very sad my friend and yes i believe i commented once before... and yes you will see your son in heaven one day great write
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I'm glad you did and yes you ahve read and commented before. it made you cry when you did the first time.
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This is a very tragic topic to write about and you left me nearly speechless, thank you for entering and best of luck here.
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I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem. It really helped me deal with it alot when i write about it. This poem probably being the best one I have written to date.
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I am speechless! It is sad when you lose a child. Even if it is not born yet. I loved the imagery. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Good luck judging the contest. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem
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Although I must say that your poem is excellent, the contest "Masterpieces of Despair" is a graphics contest and is requesting BACKGROUNDS, not poems.
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Sorry I'm not sure how I missed that. I know I was out of it this morning but I didnt think I was that bad. Sorry for the confusion.
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No worries, just thought I'd let you know. Several people seemed to miss it so your not alone. At least I got to read an exceptional poem 
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Ehh well as someone who has hosted alot of poems I know people have a tendencey to dump poems on contest that accept prewrites. I dont know if it that they just dont care of if its a simple accident like that.
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You've captured your feelings so beautifully in this poem. I'm so sorry for your loss. This is such a tragic event to deal with and I hope you are doing ok. Thanks for posting this.
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Yes i learned to deal with it and its also helped that I had another opportunity to be a "father" that really helped me move on.
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This is a very well written piece. but oh so sad I can relate to this Still you did a good job and so many memories.
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Sorry to hear that you can relate to this.
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thats really sad im sorry to hear about your loss. it must have been really hard. very well written, wish you all the best
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It was really hard at the time to deal with and I go through little mini depressions around the date that she died and the when he was suppost to be born. But I've learned to deal with it through my writing.
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I got cut off We lost the second baby five days later. It was the most devistating five days of my life! A year later my daughter was born shes the one next to me in my PIC My Ex nearly died giving birth to her and she nearly died form a low platelett co
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I'm sorry to hear about what happened.
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I truly know what you have gone through. I lost twins in a misscarrage. But the devistation was not simply from that fact . it was because We only thought ther was one baby and then they told us there was another one and we lost the second one five days l
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Having trouble?
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Oh my...
Such heartfelt pain, I hope that time has helped to heal your pain, though the memories will last forever,
and may you find comfort in knowing that God doesn't make mistakes, for everything there is a reason.
Sassy
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Yes I know that had Marlana and Derrik not died that I wouldnt have been able to help my godson and friend like I have.
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I can understand the guilt that you carry. This is so sad...not only to lose your child but his mother to. Things often get said in the heat of the moment...then things follow on...where we are left saying...if only...
I have lost my daughter 17rs ago and a partner (not the childs father) I too lost my partner to a road accident..I should have been with him. The guilt weighs heavy.
I wish you well
Thank you for sharing this. I hope with time you can heal.
~sugar~
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I'm really sorry and I appreciate you entering my contest.
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When a loved one die's in such a terrible way it is always hard for the one left. I too carry the guilt of not wanting to hug my Dad good-by...I was upset with him leaving Mom and us. That was the last time I seen him he had a massive heartattack and died alone. We can only try to forgive ourselve's and go on. I lost my only little girl(I have three sons) it was one of the hardest things in my life.
Forgive yourself
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I'm sorry to hear that and yes there were things left unsaid. Its heartbreaking to think about them.
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Oh so sad... I'm so sorry. My Dad and uncle ended on bad terms too before he was in a car accident and it always lies heavy on his heart.
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Thank you. Me and her had argued the night before she died. I still carry that guilt around with me.
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Thanks
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I'm glad I can feel your emotion because obviously it isn't made up, but I'm sorry to say I think if you took longer and really dug through the scars it could be amazing. Thank you for entering.
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Yeah I agree but i dont feel that tearng open an old wound will relly be worth it.
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hmmmm i enjoyed this very much, although i don't think it fits best with my contest
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If you dont feel it fits I wouldnt be offebded if you removed it.
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This is intense you have so much pain(as you should) and you penned it wonderfully. Congrats you have made past the audition
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My emotion is the one thing i am good at writing about.
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sad, but on the bright side the mother didnt have to suffer...like getting the baby out...it seems really painful...
well, good poem, i like it
this part was written later
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Well i think she was willing to go through the pain to have the sone. thanks for the sintement i think.
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That is so sad. If only there was some way to change it but there isn't. They are watching over you and waiting for you to arrive in heaven with them.
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Yes I know and hopefully one day I'll be meeting them there.
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OMG that was so sad! It really touched me. I'm so sorry, but they are with God now, happily watching over you
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Yes I know he is in heaven.
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Oh my heart goes out to all
Life in time of the unknown future to be we often take for granted and in doing so find becomes the past unchangied by our tears . My heart breaks for you and yes in heaven you will join again. You have penned through your heart and soul and I say with love .
I have been on the sight near two years now and would love to add you to my favorites list if thats OK with you I feel you have a way with poetry I must read more of
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Thank You and you are more than welcome to add me if you would like to read what i write.
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wow
how touching
that was truely amazing
love it
not much else you can say about it
and seeing as how you dont like to know your poems make people cry i wont tell you it did
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im so sorry
well thank you for sharing this poem with me
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Thank you for taking the time to read through it. I'm glad that something thatcaused pain for me has caused joy for others.
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Sad and beautiful. A love lost before it even had a chance to bloom. Very tragic. I am sorry for your loss, and hope that you have found peace. Perhaps the written word may serve as a release, a therapy, a way to deal with unexpressed grief. Best wishes brother.
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It really did help alot and I appreciate the sentiment and the comment.
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Wow, this is very touching.
I am speechless...
I really don't know what to say...
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Thank you and the same to you.
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oh wow.
that just ripped my heart out.
Jaq.....Im so so sorry...
This write was...it left me speechless.
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At least it didnt make you cry. I kinda feel bad when people tell me it made them cry.
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Thank you and good luck with the contest.
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awww very touching indeed.
sorry for your loss, i am sure he's you're guardian angel watching you always
Tasha
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It is nice to think that.
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Awww
This was so sad, and so very touching. I am sorry for all of your grief and loss that you've had to go through
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Its alright its part of me and what has shaped me into the person i am now. And the loss of my sone put my into the position and gave me the heart to really help out a friend of mine who is a single mom. That is me with her son the day he was born.
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I am so very sorry for your loss.
Your poem is so touching and very sad.
I am sure you loved him dearly, from the
day you found out the new that he was on his way.
Please know that your beautiful baby son is resting
in heaven with the angels. Please know that you
shall hold him in your arms when you get to heaven to.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Oh I know he is and I cant wait to the day when I get to see him in heaven. I just hope that in the mean time Go will give me another chance to be a father.
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I'm so sorry for your loss. This is a very honest write, which I respect, and I have a sense that he would have been a loved boy. Thank you for sharing this with me, best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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Thank you. I loved him very much long before he ever would ahve been born. Good luck judging the contest it will not be easy.
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A very touching lament- not only for old love, but for a soul that you will never be able to meet (perhaps one day...) I am very sorry for this loss- I hope that the words you have written will be an emotional release for you.
Despite the substance, I thought the structure of the poem was okay. The rhyme was a bit forced, but at least you meaning and your heartfelt emotions came to the surface even through the somewhat awkward rhyme scheme.. perhaps it would have been more impactful if it were in free-verse/unrhymed. Would've felt more raw. But again, I think this is an appropriate lament. Best of wishes, Cheers.
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This poem was orginally written in freeverse with the lines being somewhat equal but a few of the lines still ended up rhyming. I felt it would be easier for to just change the whole than than it would ahve been to completely reward some stanza's Thats why much of the rhyme is awkward and forced. I appreciate both the sidgestion and the comment.
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Oh..oh.. I'm so going to have a girly moment here and ...CRY.. this was so sweet of you to write this, yet I know that it was so painful for you as well.. I am sure you would have made a wonderful father!! I have written about my loss as well and it hurt so bad.. I can only think of how it was for you to write this, seeing as how your the father..But you expressed your love for your child so beautifully here.. *hugs you* bravo!
Jetleena
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I'll be a father one day. I know I will and i think I'll ake a pretty good dad. At least people say so when they see me with my godson. but thank you for the compliments on my poem.
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Wow, this gave me chills, I'm so sorry for your loss. I know what it's like to loose a child before you even get to see it and it hurts. I hope you're doing alright and great write.
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Yes I'm doing fine. Its been2 1/2 years and I've managed to deal with it this poem being part of that process. Thank you for the comment, compliment and the sympathy.
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so sad
hunni this is sad.. i know the feeling im always here for you
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Thanks I've learned to dal with it though.
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omgoodness
im so sorry for that misfortune
the write was so deep, but only you can truly feel the intensity of the words youve shared here because you lived it
very sad indeed but a good write with good flow and solid rhyme
well done
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Thanks Rena, This was one of my harder poems to write but its certainly my most fufilling.
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Sad...
Thats very sad, but well penned. I can imagine it must have been hard to write this. Thank you for sharing.
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Actually i was feeling really bad about it when I wrote it. My poetry helps me deal with it. Its my therapy.
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How heartbreakingly sad. I am so sorry for the loss of your unborn son.... that is so tragic. The loss must be very hard to bare, my heart goes out to you.
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Oh i know i will one day Ann. I cant wait until that day. Hopefully in the meantime I will have other sons here with me.
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i am so sorry about your loss. this poem puts me in tears and makes my heart bleed for you. beautifully written my friend and I am so glad we met.
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