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Angel

You came into our lives
Sparkle in your eye
Like a star in the sky
Smile as big as
The man on the moon
Happy little angel
Precious as a porcelain doll
Careful not to drop you
Loving and caring for you
Kept you from harm
Then without notice
You were gone
Beautiful angel
So young
Full of life
Heart of gold
Why did you leave
Where did you go
Our eyes full of tears
Like waterfalls
Hearts feeling pain
As if being stabbed
Out of no where
The breeze came across our face
Wiping the tears away
Mending our hearts
Calming our minds
You were there once again
Not in body
But in spirit
With a glow all around you
You are now Gods’ Angel
Sitting on grandpa's lap
Opposite my nephew
Will the 3rd
Making sure we're ok
That sparkle in your eye
Once again warming our hearts
The great big smile
Easing our minds
Letting us know you're there
Watching over us

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  • PatheticKt
    August 12, 2008

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    Oh my, for a piece that had such simplicity behind it, this was heartbreaking and I could see how tender your love is to this angel and I'm sure he/she returns that favor as well up in the heavens
    You've got one typo here which is Gods' that should be God's and to me, 3rd looks better if it was third I think line breaks are needed in some parts and I don't mean writing them into stanzas
    All in all, this is such a lovely poem and the words written here were definitely straight from the heart; each significance by this angel's feature gave such tears of joy from the first to the last line


  • Nam
    June 8, 2008
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    "You are now gods’ angel" - "wouldn't "gods'" be "god's" or "God's" if you're Christian (since Christians usually capitalize God to signify the Christian deity)?

    I felt this could have used breaks here and there beside being one breath from the first line to the last.

    Other than those two things, a nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • slipperssun gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    beautiful words straight from a heart,,, i wish you well in the contest and may you always feel the love of your child deep inside you
    cheers
    jen


  • daviscth silver member
    May 15, 2008
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    This is how I feel about baby Chloe. Your poem captured it perfectally. Thanks for posting this.