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Broken Fairytale.

Thoughts of uncertainty seep into my head.
My heart and my head at war,
the rationality and logic that keep me so alone

battles all the hopes and dreams my heart has secretly carried.

For the briefest of moments I felt happy
when you handed me a flower and said "m'lady"
with your sweet smile I became intoxicated,
I never sobered up that day.

I allowed myself the thought that it was happening
I was getting the kind of fairy tale romance every girl deserves
but the knight in shining armor of that story
couldn't fight the demons of my jaded heart.






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Before i thought it wasn't done.
but now I kind like where it ends.

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  • Perception
    April 16, 2008
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    This is really good!

    I really think you have a start to something wonderful. It really.... is great... hehehe... Hehe... I'm not really sure what to say... Because you left me speachless..
    "but the knight in shining armor of that story
    couldn't fight the demons of my jaded heart."

    That is just.... brilliant ~ Great job

    I can't wait to read the rest


  • lovelight05
    April 16, 2008

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    What you have so far is really good. can't wait for it to be finished. Good work, I really like the first few lines they pull you into the rest of the poem.