The soft breeze
picks up my sun warmed hair,
and plays with it
like a kitten with yarn.
No yells, no screams,
as I lay in the grass,
staring up at the cotton-ball clouds
drifting by without a care.
The tree stands tall,
solemnly towering,
trying to touch the blue
as the wind tosses
its green leaves turning in the air.
The grass tickles my face
as I close my eyes
feeling the peace and calm
that I missed through the day.
Unmoving by the blooming flowers
I forget all my worries,
I forget all my cares,
for now is the cleansing time
of silence in the world.
Author notes
I really do this, I try to every day after school.
A contest entry
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What do you think? How can I improve? What was your least favorite part? Your favorite?
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Very simple and clear I could relate to the softness of it. Best to you in the contest.
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This is wonderful, your descriptions are vivid. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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good
when ever i see the word cleansing i imagine something painful...i dont know why... but this poem made this word feel so much more soothing...
i like the last line the most
i dont like the background, but i goes well with the poem
overall...good
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I like how peaceful this poem is. It sounds like something we could all use doing once in a while. The descriptions are vivid and it really gets the feeling across. Thanks for your entry.
~Diana
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I liked it. You painted a picture in my mind. Very well written!
Emma ^_^
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I like, no, love this piece!
The more I read this piece,
I felt like I was in a garden =]
I'm glad to read this since
this gave me great warmth to my heart and mind
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