S tating to the world and every immigrant who views this great statue
T ruth, liberty and justice for all is its message and a dream come true.
A uthored by Patrick Henry; the solemn words “Give me liberty or give me death!”
T otal emancipation from persecution without unfair taxes as inept.
U nconditionally guaranteed by our constitution and bill of rights,
E ulogy of honor, integrity, valor as an icon, She glows in the night.
O ften times She sees the hopes and dreams come to dock
F idel in Her honor, She heeds not those words to mock.
L iberty and freedom for all of us is what echoes around the bay,
I ntelligence, literacy, and justice for all, then and today.
B rought to us as a gift to heal any acrimony
E xtraordinary in America, a dream of harmony.
R eaching up, She seditiously defies manacles of slavery,
T yranny is not tolerated within Her sacred revelry.
Y esterday many lives were spent to guarantee our liberty.
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A contest entry
- Look at the picture and write me a poem ... by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended April 28, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Funny ...
I just noticed that someone else commented and said she didn't like having the first letters separated.
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Better, but honestly ...
I liked it when you had each first letter separated with a hyphen so it was obvious that this is an acrostic. This way it's hard to tell.
I hope that the people who enter my contests read the other entries occasionally, and many might miss that this is an acrostic. -
Wonderful words! Best of luck!!!
Blessings~
Az
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Wonderfully written! Using the form: acrostic
and gave the theme a heroic kind of way!
It's good to see people write about some landmarks of Earth ^^
Although, I think it's better if you didn't separate the first letter of each line from the line itself but that's just my opinion ^^'
all in all, great write you've got here!
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Not bad ...
but there are some awkward places. The biggest one is "world of due". I have no idea what you mean by that, and doubt anyone else will either.
I normally dislike acrostics, even when I agree with the sentiments of the poem, but this one isn't bad as acrostics go.
All in all, I'd say you've not done too badly with this.
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