barefoot in gentle stillness
I know I'll likely see
the end of the rainbow
A contest entry
- Quickie Picture Prompt by Lavender Butterfly.
425 points, ended April 16, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any critique is very welcome [as long as it is done with courtesy and constructive to my learning. I thank you.
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excellent~
This bought a smile to my face as I read this one sis...
Beautiful..bought back to me anyway child hood memories
But I was always chasing the pot of gold as well
Congrats on the trophy as well
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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lovely .. a wonderful few words xx good luck xx peter
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where does the child go..
this sumptous poem reminds me of those wonderous thoughts of children....of youthful dreams, and coloring under mom's coffee table...'on the underside'
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touching - complex
beautiful image -
so much can be interpreted in the last line - the end of the rainbow -
reading your writes for the past years has been a joy
you have taken quantum jumps
and I love short form
I love the comment of tomisb -
memories for me on the coast at Newport Beach, Ca
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Innocence symbolized in bare feet. Patience as a state of being in the moment. Rainbows -- the answer to Noah's prayers, the bucket of gold at the end -- all these images and many more swirl around my mind and swell my heart as I remember the dreams when I was younger -- then.
Beautifully done.
Love,
Tom B.
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I think this is just lovely as it is, soft as a child's expectations of sunset and fascination with rainbows of the mind. Indeed, where is that rainbow we all sought so desperatly, for so long????
........in our hearts.....that's where
len
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thanks sweet friend...and it always will be in our hearts [we just have to make time to remember]
xoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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Such a pretty and enchanting write... x
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thank you so much for the kind comment
reenie
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I'd change ...
maybe to likely. Otherwise, I see nothing that you could ... or should ... change.
Very nicely done.
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comment much appreciated and I did take your suggestion. I like it better this way
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reenie
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