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I Told Her

So innocent you sleep, so blind to the world
My kisses hit your cheek, whispered love you's to my girl
I hope it sleeps forever, the innocense that is
I hope her dreams are better, then all that happiness can give
I cant help but watch her slumber, twist and turn without my touch
Her soul can feel I love her, but no words I know can say how much
No worth can sum to us
I can search the globe but come to dust
For the birth I hold is voluptuous
My heart turns to gold when you pucker up

So innocent you sleep, so blind to all I fear
My Juliet Capulet but unlike her shakespear
When you awake, no poison face, Romeo will be right here
All she knows is shes my dear, when we elope she's Mrs. Pier.
When she awoke I held her near, the words I spoke invoked her tears

I told her...

"So innocent you slept, so blind to all my thoughts
My sentiments are endlessness, without US I am lost
Without us I am frost, your smile warms away my pain
If the clouds asked how much I loved you
Id say, "More than the flowers love the rain"
More than power loves to reign
Your touch devours all my shame
Your love can coward those who claim
That they can sour what we obtain
For you are the only name, the only heart, the only frame
The sultry parts ill ever tame, the only art that draws my brain
I love you when you're sleep and ill love you when you're gone
For you are the rose i'll forever hold after those clouds allow my dawn..."

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  • AdamIzMi
    July 31, 2008
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    nice,very well written


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    July 31, 2008

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    Cute, but mildly cliche. However we all love the tale of Romeo and Juliet. A very well penned write all the same. Thanks for entering.

    Serenity


  • Cat10
    April 20, 2008
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    awww, such a beautiful piece! nice work! and good luck in all of your contests!


  • Shassidy
    April 20, 2008
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    I really like this piece! I like the emotion and references used in this along with the imagery because all of that makes this really powerful. My favorite part is stanza one because that has the best emotion and imagery. I also like the title because it is not too clichéd and it reflects the poem well, so great job with that. Great job and good luck in the contest!