ship adrift water
black wood shrinks
white albatross flies
Author notes
My first Haiku. Inspired by "The Ancient Mariner" by T.S. Eliot.
A contest entry
- Super Haiku Contest (Round 1 of 3) by Odd Thomas.
330 points, ended April 16, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I also thought the alabostrose was like an airplane. Very nice write, good luck to you in the contest and keep writing wonderful poems.
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descriptive and beautiful. Haiku's are fun but harder than some other forms I've tried. I got really frustrated when I was taking a class
. I've not written one in a while, congrats on your first. The background and image is soft and serene 
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this haiku is great, though you don't need the capital letter since they don't have capital letters in the Japanese characters, and the only problem with this is that you have it 7-5-7, not 5-7-5 or less like the contest states, if there is a way you can lower the amount of syllables in the 1st and third lines this would be an excellent haiku
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Ok. Thanks. This style is new to me and I appreciate the guidance. I did a little research but apparently not enough! I appreciate the help.
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