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The Last Sailor

Missing image
A lost horizon and a barren ship
Adrift upon waves of salt water
My ungrounded mind tries to grip
Onto something solid, concrete matter

The irony is that water surrounds me
But my soul is utterly wretched and dry
A taste of the liquid from this endless sea
Would mean my last breath and I would die

My  home afloat upon a fluid foundation
Is growing smaller with each and every day
The more I wail out my pain and indignation
My intellect grows weak with less to say

My destiny seems to be in my isolation
Upon this infinite, groundless blue orb
Helpless to the elements I cry to Creation
Where are the Angels, Heaven and my Lord?

Break me free of this endless cruel circle
The way out of this water-logged cross
Bring me a taste of mercy and a miracle
Show me, where is my  White Albatross?








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Author notes

"Alone, alone, all, all alone
Alone on the wide, wide sea
And never a Saint took pity on me
My soul in agony…"

"Water, water everywhere
And all the boards did shrink
Water, water everywhere
And not a drop to drink!"

From; The Ancient Mariner
By T.S. Elliot


Option 5f. One of my favorite works of literature of all time! My poem is based on the lines quoted and then ends with the reference to what was thought to bring luck to sailors when it followed their ship.

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  • Periwinkle Blue
    September 27

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    Awesome! I am so pleased to read such a fine poem that is written in the spirit of appreciation for a poet we admire. Thank you for coming to our pirate party!


  • Ellis gold member
    August 25

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    Excellent Poem

    This is very good poetry writing. I really felt the loneliness of it.


  • BearWoman gold member
    July 18

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    I did not think you could top the poignancy of the heart-felt plea, "Where are the Angels, Heaven and my Lord?" and then you did! (with "Show me, where is my White Albatross?"). A very well-written poem with an appealing rhythm that fits the tone/mood of the piece.

    A well deserved Gold. Congratulations.


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    June 1
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    forgot your clappies.

  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    June 1

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    very inspiring and worthy of gold cup. i felt like an Albatross hooked on the mouth and shot out of ocean like your poetry. wonderful write. thanks for sharing and congratulations.


  • tawk gold member
    May 3

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    T.S. Elliot is an awesome poet. Imagery and emotion is perfect in your amazing work of art. Captured me from the beginning and left me wanting more. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the Gold so well deserved. Hugs Theresa


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    April 27, 2008

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    Wonderful!

    Your versatility & awareness never cease to amaze me! This is a great take on the prompt of The Ancient Mariner. Thanks for reminding me how I love T.S. Eliot! Haven't read him since H.S.! That's way too long. Now you've inspired me to look him up again! This is a lovely write my friend! If I didn't know better I'd almost think you followed The Messiah! All the best in the contest!


    • kareneisenlord gold member
      April 27, 2008
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      Your're welcome my dear. Don't get me wrong; I don't NOT follow the Messiah!

      In my view of things, He is one of the many Avatars of Vishnu. He was God incarnate here on earth!

      Blessings...

      Karen


  • Nicada silver member
    April 20, 2008
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    This is a great write! A lot of nice imagery and very creative. Nice Job!


  • eltortedequeso
    April 20, 2008

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    Wow, very well written. its full of sadness and despair. Very emotional and very strong! Thanks for a great read!


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    Very nicely written poem. I like TS Elliot too. I like him for his poems based off of "CATS". Good luck to you in the contest.


  • Hebz
    April 16, 2008
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    Brilliant

    It's very powerful, on the sense that every line drove me to a deep thinking & inspiration as well...

    I like these lines:

    "But my soul is utterly wretched and dry",

    "Break me free of this endless cruel circle"

    "---actually All of it,

    Amazing Penning...

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba


    • kareneisenlord gold member
      April 20, 2008
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      Yes; you have inspired me to read more of his works now.

    • kareneisenlord gold member
      April 18, 2008

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      I am so very grateful that you appreciate my poem. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to enter your contest. "The Ancient Mariner" has been one of my favorites for my entire life. I based the poem on the parts of T.S. Eliot's poem that impressed me the most.

      • Hebz
        April 19, 2008

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        Yes, "The Ancient Mariner" poem is very inspiring & thought provoking...

        & Actually I think all Eliot's Poems, make a whole integrated community of thoughts that lead to certainty & reason.

        Thnx again


  • libithina
    April 16, 2008

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    'Water, water everywhere', yes, and not a drop to drink...great poem and so is this.. wonderfully structured...and as I was reading it..I clearly could see a vision of the most pearly white glistening albatross coming closer and closer, it is dazzling...All of my love my lovely one and the biggest hugs Lib x x x

    • kareneisenlord gold member
      April 18, 2008
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      Hi, my dear friend! That is a lovely comment. As usual, you grasp the meaning quite well. Yes, my white albatross never left me, even in my worst of times. Love to you my sweet - Karen xoxoxox


  • Lady Australis silver member
    April 16, 2008
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    wow fairy god mother
    i love you


    • kareneisenlord gold member
      April 18, 2008
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      I appreciate you reading my poem. I love you too, my fairy god-child! xoxoxoxox

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