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She Smeared My Cheek from Side to Side (with Cannonsfire)

(now for your typical, everyday romantic collaboration...)

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I thought of feeling up her dress,
but she showed up in jeans;
Oh, I was never, she never looked

this obscene in the library...
She revealed her lineage
of the wild, untame breed
fresh off a hunt in the Pleistocene;

I went for her bosom,
she parried, and offered me a kiss instead;
so I took it...

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I should have practiced more on my Real Doll
we missed three times,
ended up on the floor
she smeared my cheek from side to side...

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He is such a troublesome boy
earning a smart suspender from time to time
dawdling about with such inelegance of grace

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yet his lips are beastly...

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here is an hour I could spend
teaching him the finer points
of how to tease with the tongue
to treat a girl to such a feast
that Casanova would be jealous of…

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to know he digressed to plastic...
the horror! That unreal world-
no doll could do the things I do,
what he needs is a true blue girl…

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So I grabbed his hair and yanked him down
sending us sprawling to the floor
I dove on him, begging mounds

with unrestrained kisses issuing forth…

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Ohhhhhh, Ms. Plastic never did this
maybe I should have cleaned up a bit
after chasing the pigs through the mud pit

but hey, when opportunity knocks...

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Her lips were unbitten cherries
so I bit...
her essence, of unplucked vines
so I moved to pluck...

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A dithering was all I caused
to a boy with the smell of ducks and barnyard fowl
frenetic pecking and groping of hands
sincerely doubting I could ever turn him
into a true blue man…

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but his fingers trembled deliciously
over ripened orchards not yet stripped
of oranges untasted, still in flower

he struggled with a tenacious grip
on a zipper most uninvited
quite frustrated in the moment was
a bulge that pulsed most unrequited…

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Mmmm... note to self: discard Real Doll...

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Zipper gone

have it made

in the shade
mud on snow

hard to soft
feeling moonlit glow

anticipating the encore show-

a whoooohaa cowboy rodeo…

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I try again for that lipstick smear
that first took hold from ear to ear...

 

 

 

 

Author notes

to Cannonsfire- I am guilty of giving your finely-wrought prose meter and rhyme... (sorry, I'm addicted to it, I think...!)

Contest Note: Don't know if you'll go 'wow'; maybe a 'wooo' or a 'woah' or a 'wha?', or just possibly, a 'woot'...

pics- Raquel Welch in "1,000,000 Years B.C." (1966)
and a depiction of a typical cave drawing, slightly modified by me...

The periods are not a stylization- the fouled-up AP rich-text editor was resisting my line spacings...

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  • Dalaney gold member
    June 3

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    lol...well, this is not only fun, but damned good writing!

    two beautiful minds with a dose of humor and a shot of

    sin...how could this collab be anything but an adventure?

     

    love, lane


    • wbiro gold member
      June 3
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      oh, I'll have to go back and give this one a critical eye... (cringe...)

    • lol God I had almost forgotten this one But this guy makes you go crazy LOL


  • Swan song gold member
    April 25, 2008
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    you two are naughty lol but I loved this poem in a big way


    • Cannonsfire
      April 25, 2008
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      It is amazing what a collab can bring out and Wbiro and I were having a discussion on the tamest of things and then lo and behold this sprung up....just goes to show the psyche deep inside is always wild and raging LOL. Thanks for the silver too Love, C


  • stani
    April 16, 2008

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    nice poem! well written! hahahaha! i am still laughing! brings back some memories! lovely memories! loved it!


  • NastyNickie
    April 16, 2008

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    wow, i'm particularly at loss for words, yet again i'm sittin in a class room half full of people who have never even kissed anyone before, and the rest; sex adicts. A very very lovely poem, i'm quite sad however that i didn't catch the correct tune.

  • Rudolf
    April 16, 2008

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    I clicked on this accidently, kind of like my first encounter with a woman.... this is a most interesting look into the finely woven web of passion spun by the human animal. You certainly caught my attention and kept it....Now just a little wait for the gold trophyyour most certainly going to recieve. rudolf

  • Amber White
    April 16, 2008
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    Good write

    This is humorous but good. I really enjoyed reading this one.


  • luckynsincere
    April 16, 2008

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    omg!!! This is one of the best pieces I have read in a lonnnnng qhile~ Beautifully penned and expressions were absolutley breath taking!!! WOW!

    Thanks for sharing this piece of talent with me


    Mel


    • Cannonsfire
      April 17, 2008
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      Lol Mel it was hard not to chuckle when you collab with Wbiro for you never know what to expect! Love, C

      • wbiro gold member
        April 17, 2008
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        and we received the ultimate- an "omg!"


  • Shancy Fayre
    April 16, 2008
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    This was wild. I was really sucking in that imagery. My opinion is this piece is unique. I've always loved that picture of Raquel Welch. It is a great touch. Shancy.


  • nichtmich silver member
    April 16, 2008

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    Ahhh....that astounding first time! Fumbling and desperate, going for the prize but not quite sure how to get from point A to point B Teaching a novice can be quite......interesting!

  • mindpoet
    April 16, 2008

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    Deliciously Disgustingly Divine

    I'll give this a definite woohoo and a wahoo! Nothing beats sex for the first time. I can tell you had a lot of fun righting this; it's a fun roller-coaster to read. Especially got a chuckle out of lines 36-39 and 52-55. Thanks for sharing your expertise with us all. I'm gonna go out and get laid right now. (Hah! In my shy dreams!)
    Erik


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    April 16, 2008
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    Now that is a real scarey thought! Offspring... lol


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    Oh my god! You two are very, very sick! Gotta love it though. I just wonder if 'he' was practicing on the right bit of 'Real Doll' Juls


    • Cannonsfire
      April 16, 2008
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      Wbiro and I go way back lol and this is the first time we have ever done anything together...makes ya wonder what the offspring will be like!!!! Lol, Love, C

      • wbiro gold member
        April 16, 2008
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        you might have given me a pic idea for the end... some Pleistocene offspring...


        • Cannonsfire
          April 17, 2008
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          I like the rhyme and meter and as long as that is the only thing you're addicted to then I am safe Love, C


  • Cannonsfire
    April 16, 2008

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    LOL I swear you do things to me I never thought of before and I think I actually like it!!!!! Love, C

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