I wonder, is it better for us to awaken
When the sights that we see are bitter
And the travelling is so harsh?
From whence we came it was easy
For our appetites were satiated
And there was no real work to do
Yet we have come far searching for the dawn
And were not disappointed
To find humanity in all its splendour and ravages
Vulnerable and weak, yet bold
Our eyes have been unbuttoned
So never again shall our ways be smooth
We see an ending in a beginning
And yearn for
A beginning in an ending
We learnt that hope is not a waste of time
Yet it takes courage to live it
Author notes
Inspired by 'The Journey of the Magi'-T.S.Elliot
'Learnt' is not a spelling error, I'm English.
A contest entry
- Be Inspired By................. by GloriousGift.
650 points, ended May 10, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Like other readers, this makes me want to go back and re-read Eliot, such a favorite in earlier years. You have touched on humanity's vulnerability and hopefulness, and once we see, our ways are never again smooth... just wonderfully crafted, and so thought-provoking. I look forward to more.
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Very good poetic interpretation of Eliot's poem here. I think that you grasped much of the meaning as evidenced by your write. Nicely written, and best of luck in the contest!
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GOOD
It is indeed a sin to depair of humanity in spite of all its depravity. Good poem with a good hopeful message. -
excellent use of some imagery I have not read in a poem for awhile....
makes me want to go back and read TS Elliot
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start in the middle...
nice sway, Ms. Light. the end is a new beginning, like a wave is a surge in the sea. here's to T.S. and his fine-lined ways of cruellest months and sorts.... ~ EZB
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WOW
This's simply amazing, I like these lines:
"We see an ending in a beginning
And yearn for
A beginning in an ending
We learnt that hope is not a waste of time
Yet it takes courage to live it"
These lines completely captivated me & made me think more & more, just like Eliot's poetry...
Thnx alot for entering, & Best of Luck...
GloriousGift
Heba -
"Our eyes have been unbuttoned
So never again shall our ways be smooth"
That's so true, and brilliantly worded. Thank you for not saying our eyes have been "opened"!!
Personally, feels like you're talking to me. Especially in the last lines, because that's what I'm STARTING to learn. (And I can only hope the people I love can see that.)
And that shows that it's relatable, which is a good thing in this case.
Ace background for this, in the start I got the feeling you may've written this piece based on the image, but I understand now. Great work, truly amazing.
Best of luck in the contest!!
2mrw
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