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Flickering Candles

Flickering candles,
Flaming shadows upon the walls,
Candles burning,
Sulphur smelling,
dwindling away,
Melting down,
like snowflakes in the sun,
Candles wont burn forever,
Either will my love for you..

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  • insearchofsweetness
    April 16, 2008

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    Nice poem, intense, I particularly like the "like snowflakes in the sun" part. It is a very short song.


  • Rain-Shot-Rose
    April 16, 2008
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    Wow

    That's so intense and harsh. very well done though