She's here with me now
though you tell me she's gone
I feel her heartbeat
as if it's my own
She rides in the wind
with her lion's mane hair
blowing wild and free
do you see her?...she's there
I won't say goodbye
to she who lives fully
who embraces the lovers,
leavers, and bullies
She goes where she will
and I'll never restrain her
Cause Lane is an element
wrapped in southern demeanor
She's a force of nature
I admire and adore
And carries along with her
my love evermore.
A contest entry
- Dalaney...We Are Claiming Our Right to Say Goodbye by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended April 28, 2008, 13 entries
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This is a very nice piece. A testiment to the effects of one soul on another. Wow...it's good to see how deeply we can and do still touch each other in a world so full of selfishness/self-centeredness and corruption. I really enjoyed this piece.
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this is beautiful, i keep re-reading it because it has an almost natural flow. like the subject herself. a very good write 'who embraces the lovers, leavers, and bullies' a truly wonderful description!
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beautiful...most good! good luck..rhonda.
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Oh! i really like this poem. this is an amazing and beautiful. what a way to capture the divine essence within very sweet and elegant words...i rally enjoyed it...
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Well spoken.
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Thank you Rhonda, this is so beautiful.
Buddy -
WOW
This is breath taking! I mean I held my breath until the end. I couldn't breath in fear of it interrupting this beautiful piece of poetry. This is very deep and I enjoyed it very much!
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Beautiful . . . captures the essence of who she is . . . an untamed breeze blowing through the windmills of the mind . . . Marc
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I think you speak for a lot of us - very nice.
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nice
This woman sure has alot of loving friends and you are no exception. good work here my friend.
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Truly, a force of nature. There are those who touch us and move us in a way that makes them a permanent fixture in our life. You capture this beautifully, dynamically. Thank you.
Love, Tom B.
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Loved one resides at heart. Physical existence is one thing, but that is not all. This is a truth that man can make a contact to everything in the universe. That has been done, is being done and will be done by Yogis or people who can really explore it. You have brought out a heart felt picture with great touch.
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This is exquisite and flows like a gentle song that is indeed our Lane. Just beautiful Love, C
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