Night’s lovemaking,
an inferno, heated by two.
Naked under the starlit sly,
entwined in embrace.
Worlds collide,
as the pendulum swings.
Back and forth,
under ravaging waves.
His eyes are the key -
to my existence.
My very breath,
that I breathe.
The flicker within,
those diamond gems.
A body of David,
sculpted by the God’s.
Heaven sent to me,
for my gaze alone.
Naked within his soul,
for all eternity.
Love predestined,
to withstand time.
My essence,
of hopes and dreams
Author notes
Taken from Prompt #2. Naked by Manuel Bandeira
A contest entry
- Naked… Manuel Bandeira… by Peteskid.
1000 points, ended April 21, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Can I breathe now! This is just beautiful!!!!!
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Reading Again
Rick -
Excellent as Always
Love predestined,
to withstand time.
My essence,
of hopes and dreams
The whole verse is wonderful
The ending stunning
Rick
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Naked within his soul,
for all eternity... like this line alot;
and can related to this.
Success in your contest
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WOW!!! Sie~ you have such a way with words, sculpting them to form a portrait in the mind of the reader...This was very sensual and sultry....steamy...hot...Excellent writing...
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Well Penned!
Quite a mighty fine little penning youm have done here wqith a very exquisite taste too! kudos to producing a non adult but keeping it realistic style poem. anyw ays good work & keep it up
good luck with the contest
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Oh this is simply lovely.
Well penned.
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Very tastefully done.
I loved the emotion your passed on in this one. Kind of erotic but not nasty. Good job!
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Excellent
A very sensuous and passionate write. So very well done. Great images. Best of luck in the contest.
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I should like to meet this person that steals your heart and breath away. It is beautiful. Love, C
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Wonderful expression here of feelings and the sense of gratitude, for these things are like a gift in our lives, very well done in word choices: simple open words that reveal so much. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging....PK
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This is most sensual and beautiful dear, very impressive, best of luck in the contest.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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