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Bliss?

He sleeps,

embracing death's slivers;
chosing a world of fantasy over reality

where there is plenty

for a privledged few who

promise to help him but more than often

he waits - sometimes not so much to exhale -  

but to inhale breaths of rejuvenation,

lost to a throat blocked with the sands of disappointment

and a stomach that has tried to digest too many empty promises

from deceptive,

                        empty,

                                   food

                                            absent of nourishment.

One man's death

is another man's mercy.

 

Selah.

 

 

© 2008 John M. Swails

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  • Blooming Poet
    May 11, 2008

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    Such amazing wording. Your poetry is amazing. You are my new fav poet. this blew me away. you dug deep into some beautiful emotions


  • Lyrical Rain
    April 29, 2008

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    Greedy Greedy Americans! I heard this loud and clear. There is scripture that says that the last shall be first and the first shall be last. Money hungry folks; what will they do now because the seal of economics has been opened and the value of the American dollar is now lost. All their faith is into those dead presidents and not God himself. I wonder how long will they last


  • Ithica silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    We should be ashamed of our merciless habit of looking the other way when there are those that need... But in the end it will be the ones who have too much (greed) that will end up lacking... A gut wrenching write!


    • WisdomWarrior
      April 19, 2008
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      Indeed we should be ashamed. Perhaps we should pray for shame so we can become more human.

      I like the lat line of your comment, "But in the end it will be the ones who have too much (greed) that will end up lacking"

      John


  • lostangel07
    April 19, 2008
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    Amazing piece. So deep. Great write.


  • Maedes
    April 19, 2008

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    throat blocked with the sands of disappointment...well expressing the feeling...
    if we want we can do something simple for those 'unlucky' people, put all the unwanted coins in our old socks and give it to them and many other things...
    just action
    thanks for sharing and reminding to us

    • WisdomWarrior
      April 19, 2008
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      This is true Maedes. Like the Nike commercial says, "Just do it!"

      Thank you so much for your comments. Keep the spirit alive my friend.

      One Love,

      John

  • mindpoet
    April 19, 2008

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    Cuts Through The BS

    Absolutely right on. I think that Bill Gates, Warren Buffett(probably pronounced 'buffet') and all these other gozillionaires should be forced to read this. you present here the sharpest critique of what it is like to be an outcast in our empty and vain 'capitalocracy'. Very potent! I wish you luck in the contest.
    Eric

    • WisdomWarrior
      April 19, 2008
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      This is true. Perhaps this poem will make its way to their computer screen per chance... or maybe we could just tie it to a rock and through it through their $10 Billion dollar window. (Hee hee).

      Thanks for stopping by and reading it.

      One love,

      John


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 19, 2008

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    In a climate of winners and losers, the vulnerable often don't get any further than the doorway. Yet, even so, there are those who care and must continue to do so, because every soul that is born has value and waits to be loved.

    'a stomach that has tried to digest too many empty promises from deceptive, empty, food absent of nourishment'


  • arafura gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    "he waits - sometimes not so much to exhale -
    but to inhale breaths of rejuvenation,
    lost to a throat blocked with the sands of disappointment..."

    Compelling write my friend. You speak the truth! Good luck in te contest!


  • Violent Serenity
    April 16, 2008
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    oh wow, very striking write you have here. well done, keep it up good luck in the contest! ^.^


  • Amergin
    April 16, 2008
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    Sad, but true. I like it.


  • j-ay rose
    April 15, 2008
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    ^___^!!


    i love the last two lines. they bring the rest of it together perfectly.


  • VerminVomit
    April 15, 2008

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    awesome

    he sleeps, embracing death slivers;
    is so...imageryish and awesome...
    and the end one man's death is another man's mercy wow...i dont know what to say... to awesome for words to explain... i wish i could like give you more applauses than 3


    • WisdomWarrior
      April 15, 2008
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      Thank you. You're comment has left me without words.

      Thankyou.

      John


  • line shakes
    April 15, 2008

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    Wonderful. Your thoughts are wise and i love they way you make it into poems. The metaphors are so powerful displaying, an endless hunger in this indifferent world. Thank you for sharing a piece like this. This is what matters, this is what we should take up and try to solve.

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