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Blood Stained

I'm waiting out in the cold
You deserve this
In my mind
I can picture perfectly what I'd do
Slit your throat and hope
I can clearly see the pain in those eyes
And when you collapse,
I'll wrap you in a stolen body bag
And get rid of you
But on your cell,
you walk by
I didn't even have the chance to

Waiting in the light of your window
Outside your house
I smile, thinking
'It couldn't be this easy'
If I could get into your room
How cleanly I could kill you
Wouldn't that wipe that
Plastic smile off your face?

I've never hated someone so much
That's why I've decided
I can be a much better you
And that's what I plan to do
It'd be so damn easy to replace you
With a nice, better, redeemed soul

I realize the irony
But you honestly
Have been asking for this
For some time now
Who am I to deny
Your subconcious
Self-loathing request

You took my place,
You took my life
And for a second time
You walk by
And I'm captivated
By how much I want to just
Slice you finely
Burn your ID
Hide in your skin
So they can't find me

But the greatest irony?
You listen to this very song
As if I were the one who let you down.
Well, we'll find out about that later won't we?
With your blood, warm on my hands
That betrayed look in your eyes
I've never wanted someone to die this much before
But I'll make you pay, I'll have revenge
And we'll just see who's laughing then.

Author notes

5. From First to Last- Ride the Wings of Pestilence
~It's a bit messy, and dark, but not really related to personal feelings of hate, which I don't think I'm capable of. I tried to follow the songs pattern, but that's also a bit messy. Thanks for reading!

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  • AutumnsFlame
    April 22, 2008

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    I like how you followed the song and really stuck to the subject. The story was good, but I thought it lacked imagery and description. That's something you should practice. Thank you for entering my contest.