There was not more
than a whisper
but enough to tingle my ears
and toes
It was like the sound of dispersing clouds
(I imagined I knew how it sounded)
showing the moon
A night gift
under amber sheets and silver lights
where everything ceased to matter
but a whispered yes
Author notes
I borrow this BG from Voices...I don't know him for too long and am already borrowing stuffs.
Thanks Voices, and luck for you that you aren't a woman with the same sizes as I have.
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"It was like the sound of dispersing clouds
(I imagined I knew how it sounded)
showing the moon...
a whispered yes"
Wow, This is just beautiful... the celestial view blending with the intimate moment so well.
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Beautiful!!
Wow~ Another Gem of a piece and You sure know how to exhale pieces to touch deep~
How You do that
Love this!!
A night gift
under amber sheets and silver lights
where everything ceased to matter
for later
Keep that quill dancing Beautiful!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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To imagine the sound of dispersing clouds... Very interesting and great line that is sweet mommer! It could be anything that's gracious, or soft whispers... So there's lots of hope it won't be the sound of farting
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Gorgeous
I just finished watching The Darjeeling Limited and this poem has a remarkably similar feeling to it. Very soft and spiritual and "in the now." I liked it a lot.
Thanks for your comment on my latest piece of fluff. Glad it gave you a chuckle. I hope you've been well. You were my first best friend on this site about five years ago but we've fallen out of touch. Let's change that.
Mark
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I still think of you when I see and eat (drool lol ) Zero chocolate bars
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Simply lovely my friend...
Hugs...Eddy
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The great things about words, written and otherwise is that we can all shape them to fit ourselves and whether it's a poem about unfulfilled things or about sex, the reader applies his thoughts. That is also what is good about dialogue, it teachers us to be better readers.
You are very talented and thank you for explaining the depth...it's easy to have a preconception of somehting, but it is to our detriment for it quite often will keep us from a deeper understanding. Thanks for teaching me that tonight.
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You are far too talented. I wish my comments were worthy, but here, have a
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Oh Mari,
First that jummy background and than..... this verry much more yummy YES.
A delicious poem.
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this verse is just amazing ...
filled with subtlety and elegance ...
I feel sacredness in the scene you so gracefully revealed ...
delightful,
maa
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her call fell light on summer wind
and rested upon my weary ear
how could i not answer?
as I was speachless,
yes
drenched my lips
as if my life
depended on just
one word.
the gift of inspiration has found you once again, and has been generous.
great write.
Darin.
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Cannot say it better than Tara and Namita...this is simply beautiful poetry...PK
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(Mari - you are one of the most kindest & funniest people I have met here)
"where everything ceased to matter
but a whispered yes"
*sigh*
this poem is sensual & so sexy, Mari...I love this...what a beautiful poem..I love it when someone we are with has that capability of making us forget about EVERYTHING else but them
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This is so beautiful... the "whispers" and the "tinglings"... so very beautiful, Mari...
- namita
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