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Under The Moon

I awake
At sunset
To kill

Whoever
I please

Heat from
Their blood

Courses through
My frozen
dead body

My fangs I rip
From the neck

All to soon
The lifeless bodies
Fall

to the ground
At my feet

They remain
As I walk away

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  • Simply Simple
    June 6, 2008

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    Eh... I love vampires... But this was only okay... Not horrible not great. The word dark? A bit obvious. Thanks anyway.


  • -BlackKnight- gold member
    June 5, 2008

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    Sorry, vampire poems are boring.

    Anyway, I'm guessing this is based on "dark".

    Not a very dark poem, though.