catastrophic undertones
masked beneath soft, gentle moans
many years of crazed obsession
behind a curtain of affection
sharpness, he's on the edge inside
yet by her laws he does abide
the secret passion underneath
though his heart he falsely does bequeath
to her
though she does not know
the feeling that he can't expose
he wants, he needs the only thing
he takes her hand, gives her his ring
and in this passionate bestowing
she gives herself away without knowing
the plans behind this treasured act
the lies behind their measured pact
and afterwards she loves him more
she sleeps as he walks out the door
a second thought he does not spare
for how much she really did care
about him
and as she wakes, she starts to cry
for the heartfelt love that was really a lie
A contest entry
- how far?? by onapedestalIstand.
300 points, ended May 6, 2008, 27 entries
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Comments
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this is good. but i hope this didnt ruin your chance for a guy. not all are evil. some of us, it was the female that screwed them over. great write!!
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nah, this poem is compeltely fictional...well, for me anyways...thanks for the comment
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well thats good. youre welcome
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Just a quick comment to say thanks for entering this into my contest, sorry you didnt win but obviously there can only be three trophies given, which is a shame cause in this contest there deserved to be alot more winners! xxx
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Wow, that's very powerful. I hope this doesn't typify your experiences with men...not all men are evil. Your poem leaves me with a feeling of heartbreak. Thank you for entering.
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wow really great write
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NICENESS!!!!=p sarah
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please read the rules
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a very strong piece. it grabbed me and pulled me in, and the rhythm contributes to the intensity. the last seven lines could be stronger, but the rest was nearly perfect.
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oh my freaking god!!!!!!! that was amazing
i could never write something that good...men are evil
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