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Here I am

I'm mad,
I'm sad,
I want something I never had.

It's new,
It's true,
It's clearly related to you.

When you stare,
When I flare,
When it's spread in the air.

Or when it's near,
When it's clear,
When it sparkles in my tears.

I feel it deep,
I can't sleep,
I'm standing on a mountain, so steep.

Won't you save me,
Tease me, please me,
Won't you dive in my Love's sea.

Here I come,
Here I am,
Here I wait for you to put off my flame.

Author notes

Well, I know it's very repeated in all poetry ages,lol

But I wanted to write something light & quick...


Please tell me, what you DIDN'T like about it!

Thnx

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  • No Quarter
    July 10

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    great job with this one. i can honestly say there wasn't a part of it i didn't like. it was all very nicely done. great flow to it. thanks for entering and good luck.

  • Tempa Lee
    May 3, 2008

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    hey this is Dani...the judge of the contest. just to let you know that i do not know who you are...so if you know me please don't be upset if i leave you a comment that does not make you smile. it's just i'm judging this contest and i wanna be able to seek out the good and get rid of the bad. LOVED IT! from start to finish. it had the nicest flow to it. great job. keep it up and thanks for entering.


    ~Dani~


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    April 15, 2008

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    There was NOTHING that I didn't like about it--
    Very well done & Best of Luck in the contest!