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Risen

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Risen

When the darkened world had fallen behind me
and  the pain and sorrows had disappeared.
I followed the angels attentively
and lost all the heartache that I had feared.
I was led to a light that shown brilliantly
and lovely diaphanous wings appeared.
Now standing above where they laid me to rest,
I smiled at it all; it was simply a test.

 

 

 

Author notes

Ottava Rima:
An Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octaves. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme scheme:
one octave poem. abababcc
two octave poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octave poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

Art work by: cosmosue

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  • Ellis gold member
    February 8
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    Neat poem

    You ALWAYS pass the test with "A+"

    "there is no try"


  • aboomer silver member
    April 21, 2008

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    As soon as I judge this contest (Picture Prompt, When-we‘re-Gone), I am setting up an INVITE ONLY -
    PLEASE enter THIS poem in that contest. I can not give enough top awards in the original contest, and this deserves a higher award than what I can give it there…..so please re-enter this in the “Invite Only”.
    Thank you.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    April 20, 2008

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    This is lovely in its brevity and feeling.
    I too saw this image and could not find the
    words to write for it. You surpass visuals
    and reach for deeper thoughts.

    Blue


  • jo-el
    April 19, 2008
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    as always the rhyme sounds good. a perfect caption for that image...that's my word. very nice


  • second-born
    April 17, 2008

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    I loved its flow...very natural and the ending was so beautiful and so inspirational...this is very captivating indeed!

  • Eusebius
    April 16, 2008

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    Bravo!

    Short, yes, but ever sooo sweet! a most wonderful poem, indeed! Loved it, loved it, absolutely loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • PerVirtuous
    April 16, 2008

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    Unbelievable take for a picture prompt. I am awed and amazed. You are on fire. my darling. Keep it up!


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    Well done for this. You certainly do write a lot of different forms, and you have done wonderfully here. I loved the last line "it was simply a test", what a great ending. All the best for the contest.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    April 15, 2008
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    Lovely dear Amera, and you are such an inspiration.

  • Papagallo
    April 15, 2008

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    Amazing take on the picture. I go mainly with free-verse, as I did enough of the others years ago. You, my dear, seem to be a scholar at all. Wish you well in the contest. Papagallo

  • Papagallo
    April 15, 2008
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    Amazing take on the picture. I go mainly with free-verse, as I did enough of the others years ago. You, my dear, seem to be a scholar at all. Wish you well in the contest. Papagallo


  • Faeryn
    April 15, 2008
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    Amazing!!!! I love the picture too.
    Love,
    Taylor


  • aboomer silver member
    April 15, 2008
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    I wouldn't have known this was a form as it was so nicely done and read so well. I don't think I've read an Ottava Rima before - so for following such a tight syllable count, this was very well done! I like how you ended this also.
    thank you for the nice entry
    best wishes


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    April 15, 2008

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    Excellent

    Amazing take on the picture prompt. Fantastic form as well. I was studying this form the other night and plan on trying it soon.
    Of course you made it look so easy
    Form Queen Amera

    Wish you the best!

    Much love
    Many blessings
    David


  • LadyLavender gold member
    April 15, 2008
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    Wow!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 15, 2008

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    On another day I would comment in Rime Royale as is my wont for all your Ottava Rima, but perhaps today you will let me off with a prose comment. I know you hate prose but still...
    Your lovely job as always a beautiful restful poem was what I needed tonight.


  • StarEyes
    April 15, 2008

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    Amazing!! is there any other word for what you write? I think not!! This is truly brillant!! I love every word of it, and I felt like I was there, looking down on this scene almost...

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    April 15, 2008

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    sisss princesss i got only few words to say and they are AMAZING write your write took me into thoughts all the way


  • And Hyetal
    April 15, 2008

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    You always have the best last lines, this one no exception. This poem was great, short and sweet.

    A great read.

    ~Cassie


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 15, 2008
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    Beautiful


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