I was lying assleep
and i sat up and saw:
a door
as i stand i start to wonder
what is beond this door
i slowly walk and look
my heart beating
breathing hard
feeling terrified
as i approach the sacred door
i stare into the deep abyss
as i open the door
it starts to get hot
as it opens slowly
with every inch it gets hotter
finally
the door is wide open
the heat is unbearible
as i look through the sun temperature threshold
i realize its HELL
deamons
monsters
lost souls
the devil looks at me and beckons me
i start to walk
and a bright light interviens
i look at the holy bright light
and god looks at me and says
"its not your time"
in a magical voice
i wake up
and everythings white
I realize I'm in heaven
the lord has saved me
A contest entry
- God will not prevent the storm, but He will help you through it. by Kooks.
300 points, ended May 14, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Must I smile once more? by Sweetangelgrace.
475 points, ended May 20, 2008, 19 entries
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Comments
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Very well expressed!
Thanks for entering...
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Thank you very much for your entry. Loved the idea of a doorway into Hell, and generally thought that the poem was well written and lovely but I am not quite sure as to how far it relates to the theme for my poem. But still thank you for sharing your work with me.
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Wow, this is a fairly good poem by my standards.
Your use of grammar (well, punctuation; there is none and there were a few mis spelled words) but hey it drew my attention fairly quickly. Keep up the good writes!
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This has not earned any trophies, I aksed speciaficallly for one gold and one at least one of another trophy. You will be DQ. I am sorry, you should have read the rules.
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deep is the best pretty good
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wow very impressive
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OMG
I love this it is amazing. U r an awsome poet.
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