in stone
each movement of air
is written;
mathematics of water
and tears are mapped-
these settle as negatives
etched across empty
which is how the wind
long gone is known
and how a river un-
dries itself
in the silence of a day.
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A contest entry
- what happens in the white spaces by Dienush.
750 points, ended April 30, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
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i like the peace and quietus of this peace. i must say i have annihilated my silence in contemplating this wonderful write.
as always, you are excellent.
thanks for sharing.
HENSLEY
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I love how this poem combines elements of nature with feelings and with silence. The words are wisely used and I enjoy the imagery they create. Thanks for your entry.
~Diana -
Been too long since I have sank within the essence of your words.
The calm contemplation breaths such beauty within the threads through out words. Crafted with such self.
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Your last stanza is stunning.
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I find this fascinating. I don't know if you've ever been to Scotland but I have, in the Highlands and the Orkney Isles. Especially in the Orkneys, I found the landscape to be seemingly empty feeling, so big and endless yet beautiful - I felt on the verge of tears, as if I could see forever. This poem makes me feel the same way - it's starkly beautiful.
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"and how a river un-
dries itself
in the silence of a day."
Stunning, brilliant work, my Friend. I hope you're (becoming) prepared for your dance with Destiny, Sweetie...pennings like this will ensure your name is etched in stone. Good luck in the contest, Poet. Remarkable stuff. 
Wanda
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Wow, I love how you take the empty and fill it with memory ... like a negative transformed into the movement of a moment caught in time
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You write peace beautifully.
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