The sun met earth’s horizon as it dressed
with rubies, indigo, and golden tie,
and glowing globe suspended in the west
prepared to light the floor of nightclub’s sky.
It lowered in the heaven’s dimming day,
while sphere still cast soft shadows in the swirl.
Through silence, stars then entered sparkled sway
with twinkling visions of the twilight’s twirl.
In poised position, flickering the beat,
within the dazzling diamonds of the gleam,
they slow and fade, as clapping clouds repeat
reminders of the final dance’s dream.
Awakened firmament clears ballroom’s floor
with hope of future nights forevermore.
Author notes
round 5~
topic: nature
form: sonnet
poetic device: alliteration
A contest entry
- NO GREENS - ROUND 5 - Invitation Only by Idle Mind Wondering.
10000 points, ended May 21, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This embodies the sonnet; it carries heartfelt warmth and beauty; yet, like a ballad there is allusion and depth to your story.
Bravo!
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those words mean a great deal to me... thank you
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Beautifully executed. Meter and rhyme simply sung in this wonderful sonnet. You have done this form proud.
Your final couplet is stunning and so full of vision it makes me smile. Great use of alliteration to help mold the words in even flow from tongue to lips. I loved this.
Excellent entry in this round poet. Well done.
~Pamela 
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thank you.
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Excellent
Oh my what an incredible poem you have penned. So perfect for the title. Best of luck in the contest.
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incredible
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What a beautiful work of art...this is amazing, the imagery and metaphor are perfect...you have painted such a wonderful dreamy picture in my mind...it is so wonderfully elegant and captivating...your alliteration in perfect...this piece is all it can be and more...wonderfully done...
Best to you and thank you for sharing your beauty with us...
Love,
mystic
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going, I am starstruck by this beautiful sonnet you have penned for us to enjoy. The alliteration leaves such fantastic pictures floating before my mind's eye. The rhythm and rhyme are both spot on and you captured the prompt most wonderfully here. It is sparkling and your elegant use of vocabulary stands out making it all the more. You make me feel like dancing after this one. Hmmmm, thinking of a song now.
Thank you for sharing with all of us and best wishes in the round. I knew you would move forward with the last one you had done. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce 
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Stunning! Your alliteration made it so easy to get lost in the beauty of the imagery. Lovely penning! You are so good at switching between forms...a well-rounded poet
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thank you.
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definately the best alliteration i've ever read. i like how the words just flowed together, like a dance. and it was a sonnet....priceless.
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thank you... it was supposed to be just like that... a dance of the stars... maybe prom is on my mind... haha
but dance, stars, moon, sunset.... i love that stuff!
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wows.... sonnet AND alliteration..... i'm speechlessssss
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YOU? speechless? haha... oops did i laugh out loud there? my bad
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Oh! I didn't even notice it was a sonnet until the end. Does that make dense or make you a very good rhymer? Loved it. Especially the disco-ball moon metaphor. Clever! Good luck in the contest!
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well... since you could NEVER be dense, i must be a good rhymer. jk thanks!
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