My dark heart
conspiring to deceive
on lingering lies
of true love
and gentle words
hiding the blunt
blow of intent.
Kept strung along
with storied innocence
trust and naivety
turned back on you
to lengthen the charade
concealing betrayal.
Her voice in my ears
when you speak,
her eyes looking
back from you,
her touch when
you are touching me
her lips when
you I kiss.
Taking your place
in the dark
until the next time
I work late
attend a conference
or visit a sick friend.
Better you should
never know that
I’m talking to her
when I say
“I love you.”
Author notes
Dark and creepy, for your consideration.
A contest entry
- Something Wicked This Way Comes.... by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended May 4, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow, I must say, I like this piece. it's easy to read, doesn't abuse anything. and well, the ending lines say it all, don't they? Great job and keep on writing =)
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A very well composed piece of deception indeed. Poignant beyond words, something so many can sadly feel - woven into a darkened confession. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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I am speechless. Wow, Garrison. This is moving. If it isn't yours- it's someone's raw, deep, truth. It is beautiful and honest. I'm sitting, silently in awe.
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gosh. how really ...really, really. Uh. freaky and edgy! I mean it.
I see someone digging for gold and finds an illusion behind it. *shiver*
It steps in... steps out... then effectively steps down to the delusion
'I’m talking to her
When I say
“I love you.”'<------- Oh m'goodness. That's the pass go as far as I'm concerned. You win. Sheesh.
Reminds me of "There's a Stranger In My House"....and another piece somewhere, " if you hear the pillow, it's my prayer to beg someone else to go".
or how about
" That's How Much" by Ambrosia, or
"It's Sad To Belong To Someone Else" England Dan & John Ford Coley".
... ohhhhhhhhhh those meddlesome obsessives that we like to find untangled!
Great one , my friend!
(Content overrules form, but the form fits nonetheless(
*except you could still leave out capitals here; it's nearly dialogue*
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Alarmingly well-written. As though you've had experience in this arena before...
I'm going to lean towards the argument that it is just poetic skill and artistic imagination - but it is rather creepy how well you've slipped into this role.
Deception is fascinating to me...
and so is your writing!
I have been missing out while I've been neglecting your poems!
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....aw man pull back on the stick hard, before you crash into that mountain.
I wouldn't want to be in this person's shoes. LOL
Ok I'll shut up now.
Good job,
Paul
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how honest and cruel i love it
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