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Death Awates

Death Awates

People Walking
People talking
Soon it will end
as i stand here disgusted
looking at death
i see behind his hood
I see his bony smile
i smile thinking good,
It will end.
In a raspy voice i hear him say
Its time for you to pay
His Voice cold but confering at once
and i hear a docter say
She is... Dead
Then i see a light
Its so bright
When death awates.

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    April 18, 2008
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    Welcome to allpoetry

    Well there are some spelling errors. awates - awaits, docter - doctor, confering - comforting. Otherwise it is creepy and morbid.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy
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  • DawnKestrel
    April 16, 2008
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    Spooky!

    This is really good! I like the way all of your poems have a relavent picture at the top. This poem is very true in my eyes. It will end. Well, it will end for all of us one day, even if we don't want it to. Quite a spooky poem. I like your style of writing, and picture choice!


  • nichtmich silver member
    April 16, 2008

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    This is good and weird. Oh well, we all get to pay someday don't we? Great poem if a little spooky. Thanks for the read!


    • FuturePoet96
      April 16, 2008
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      Thanxs

      I came up with this poem when i was really depressed cause I felt like i had no one cause my mom got married to a Thief.

      -sierra