she holds me in her wonderful arms
kisses and caresses me
tells me she loves me and that she cant stop thinking of me
as i sit here writing this now she is behind me wiggling about
she drives me crazy up a wall
but when she touches me i begin to fall
could i ask for a better partner?
hell no bitch she fucking raped me!
but i liked it soo it was ok
her: will you go out with me??
me: maybe i will maybe i wont it all depends will you rape me?
her: yes. hell yes
A contest entry
- What Do You Want? by violetrose.
630 points, ended May 15, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hell yes
Comments
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This was an interesting piece. I'm not really sure what you were getting at, but I did like the lines
she drives me crazy up a wall
but when she touches me i begin to fall
There are a few criticisms, though. First of all, the piece doesn't really have much of a flow, and the end with the people talking is a bit out of the blue. Overall, it doesn't seem like you really tried; the piece feels a bit like a joke. Maybe I'm missing something? Either way, thanks for entering the contest. -
hell yeah lol
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ok thats got to be the weirdest way to go out with anyone but if it makes u happy then its all gd lol
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