Play the victim once more
The quicksand tides
In hourglass lies
Hollow child
Mirroring the life you wish to lead
Little doll
Playing the girl you shall never be
Perform your suicide tragedy
Adorned with artificial tears
All to an audience who isn’t there
In a miserable attempt to make them care
Curtain call
You’re still alone
Standing within the ghost light glow
A razor
An intent
An idea
Anticipation
Expectation…
One more failed attempt…
Her greatest performance
Absent a single witness
Go home young one
Remove your mask of sorrow
Peel away your imitation scars
Sleep well this cold night
Think not of those you so long to be
The forgettable’s you fail to see
Think not of Dani, Asia, 009, or me
Unharmed in your taintles dream
An Encore shall breath at sunrise
Just one more act in the Drama
Play the victim once more
The quicksand tides
In hourglass lies
Hollow child
Mirroring the life you wish to lead
Little doll
Playing the girl you shall never be
Author notes
This one was inspired by an old friend of mine. Though it could apply to most of my friends here in Calabasas. Acting that part they wish to lead. The part they wish me to believe. Yet this play is getting old...
Written December 12th, 2003
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melodrama, drama queen. good portrayal. in line 31 i think you meant breathe instead of breath. i especially like the first and fourth stanzas. i enjoyed all of it, but those stanzas really jumped out at me.
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I must say this is the most ingenous take on suicide and self-hatred that I have ever seen. I'm in love with your words. I would never have thought to compare the victim with an actress, but with a title like 'casting call' you can't help but do just that and it's really quite brilliant. The flow was continious and the form kept the eye moving and was never tiresome. Great job here.
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Wow, seems like whoever this was about, Harmed you in a way? Maybe so, maybe not. Maybe I'm just reading it the wrong way. None the less, the lines were raw, and full of emotion. Have you ever thought to publish your work?
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Dude, this is crazy. Really well done. Brilliantly written. Truly captivating. This is an awesome poem. *and on your author page, punks rule. No question. We are the spice of life. Heh, anyway, very cool. I can't wait to read more.
a shattered prince -
great write. Very emotional, and chilling, I liked it. Interesting read, provides vibrant imagery and discription. ~~Mandy
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You did a beautiful job at putting this into words. It's like a play almost. The pictures slide by like a movie, like pictures in a projector.
wow...this is a beautiful piece. Very much power and emotion, and a good way to say enough is enough. And by having the circle in the writing you say 'your getting no where.'
I really like this
Great job
Keep it up~
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Wow-simple fabulous write. I loved every line and followed every word as it kept me intrigued from start to end. Very nice flow and evenly structured. You are indeed a true poet, rare, but you do what you do. Thank you so much for sharing and I hope you continue writing.
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