the blinding wreckage tears at my wits
devoid of emotion and stamina
a heartbeat away from sanity
looking into crushed glass mazes
shards of light reflected off of ice
steaming dry it burns to the touch
the icicles form in the blue of my eyes
cold wind in my breath
red ribbon hangs nailed to a tree trunk nearby
my vision lies frozen there
one move discovers the sliver
white glass bleeds to red
the blood seeps slowly into the cracks
and disperses
over the millimeter smooth surfaces gradually
lethargy sets in for the kill
my lungs gurgle quietly in the night
a wind tassels the red ribbon
glass shard eyes watch undeliberately
fingernails split from quick to tip
the blasting noise ringing forth
is a faint hum in my ear
in the distance lights flash and sirens sound
without moving they approach
invisible am I to them
secluded in my memories
consciousness drifts
the ice moves up the glass and freezes the flesh
white on my eye lids
white in my hair
white landing lightly all around me
my eyes are frozen open
red ribbon is ripped from the nail
it flies higher than laughter
white glass
white ice
white to fill the goblet
oh, to drink it red again
Author notes
For Brandon
Written December 11th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- dear. we must eat the liver. sweet as june. we must. dear. by jaunty pill.
300 points, ended June 20, 2006, 52 entries
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I know this is a b*tchy comment, but I find this very difficult to read with the background and the white writing. I guess I will copy and paste to a document or something. maybe my eyes are just dead from too much reading.
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thank you very very much!!! ^_~
Liz -
The imagery in this is STUNNING! The fow is perfect, and the emotion is heavy in this piece. I like it a lot.
Thanks for entering.
*~~MF~~* -
wow...now I know that is an understatement, but WOW! what a deep and emotional write..you gave the words such stregnth and power...then you made it full of emotion. excellent verbage, brilliant flow, flawless imagery. very well penned, bravo!
~~Jenn -
"red ribbon is ripped from the nail
it flies higher than laughter"
i loved these two lines and the last one...it gave me the impression that you felt dead and apathetic inside and would give anything for passion, for life. i never quite know how to interpret your poetry, although it's not completely abstract and follows a storylike pattern at times (something i wish i could accomplish). i didn't know if i should take this literally (as in physical pain) or figuritively (mental, emotional anguish). god i feel so dumb sometimes when i read your poetry. your writing is appreciated and enjoyed, though.
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WOW! This seriously blew me away!!
I'm in love with this. The imagery is amazing
and this is so sad. I could like see everything,
every little thing that you described. Thats just
awesome. There is so much emotion in this and its
just...crazy! hehe I got shivers all over my body
from reading this. It seesms like my house just became
so cold!! lol Beautiful Write.
Best of luck in the contest,
as if you need it
twizted bizkit -
whoa, this is stunning... i could literally see everything you described, it was so clear....and i liked how you put everything to the ribbon. great job ^_^ and good luck in the contest,
-taori
Edited on Dec 14, 9:18 because ''.
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