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Scarab

humble dung beetle
elephant breaks wind at dawn
scarab drowns in poop

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  • Odd Thomas
    April 15, 2008

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    this is a very funy haiku you have written, there is just one concern i have, on the line"elephant breaks wind at dawn", i dont know if you know this or not but haiku generally tends to be more of what you see, so you see the elephant "breaking wind" but the problem is that not everyone may know what "breaks wind" means, but i think if you were aiming more for humorous i think the word "fart" would be acceptable in this and make it a bit funnier too, good job, thank you for entering my contest and good luck