This tattered heart,
a time-scarred survivor
nearly spent but
still in the fray.
A weary-laden seeker
of truth and solace,
trudges along
clutching any ray of hope
and the threadbare dreams
of yesterday,
silently awaits
total consumption.
A contest entry
- A Wordplay Poetry Contest by -BlackKnight-.
600 points, ended June 9, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Worn...
The use of the word threadbare gave it away for me.
Interesting write. It was pretty good.
Thanks for entering.
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"Dark", amirite?
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I must have missed my mark, the word I wrote about is in the second word group. Am I to tell you which one?
HBY -
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You can if you want. I'm thinking it's "worn", now.
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And right you would be, thanks for hosting this creative contest.
HBY
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This reminds me of Sawyer in the LOST episodes. I love how the character clutches "any ray of hope", and is awaiting total consumption. Great way to put the feeling, and true.
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Wow!
I was wondering why I saw darkness here & then saw you were in a contest! Good write & I trust you'll do well. This tattered heart waiting consumption! I can identify. Love the way you started this & the way the tattered heart is clinging, but somehow awaiting total consumption seems bleak to me! I'm having a ruff day & was hoping for your usual cheerful self! Oh well...
anyway for a fine write! All the best in this contest..
gotta go rest! 
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