in fading memories
of yesteryear
and leaves which fall off
way too fast
a glimmer of hope
in the eyes
of a grasshopper
show me the path
we used to take
so long ago
under the
tingling drops of
persistent rain
we held each other
and just
-let go-
laughing it off
like a silly joke
puddle after puddle
we jumped
creating ripples
just like the happiness
in our hearts
and when we finally
reached our doorsteps,
we finally gazed
at each other
with true love
which existed
only in fairytales
Author notes
~ been on A.P. for 1 1/2 years.
~ come online (almost) everyday
~transit
A contest entry
- Sidewalk.... pavement.... poems by Melodies.
600 points, ended April 20, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Audition Round by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended May 14, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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nice write! I loved the stanzas and they were beautiful! Very touching!
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This is a lovely poignant poem, a reminiscence of 'new love', now consigned to the realm of fairytale.
Some gorgeous imagary here 'yesteryear and leaves which fall off way too fast'...'a glimmer of hope in the eye of a grasshopper'.... the third and fourth stanzas paint the picture so well.
The final stanza paints the bittersweet quality of a remembered time of love so well.
PJ
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this poem is very cyclical and has a frost like appeal to it. i like the first stanza the best. thank you for your comment on my poem
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fabulastic write! i love it.
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'fairytales can come true,they can happen to you.... if you are amongst the very young at heart'[excerp from a very old song]
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Wonderful poem
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You obviously have talent and its starting to emerge in this poem, but I feel you could of given so much more. Congrats though you have made it past the audition round.
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wow. simply beautiful hun! you deserve the HM!
i love this write-- fairytales and rain
oooh so awesome love the start and the middle and the ending! plusyour style was just awesome
you are so amazing at this arent you?
BEST LUCKS
char
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45/50 for following rules ( where's age?)
25/25 for overall poetic ability
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooooooooooooooo!!! I do love anything that talks about fairy tales!
This poem is lovely in all ways. 
Sweetly said, truly. ++++
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I love this! All the best in the contest!
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