An allure aerates my substance porous
affecting each part of respiration
lost in soft breeze of adoration
as we hum sweet lyrics of love's chorus
For beneath epidermis is your name
like an enamel to my very bones
to create faded all troubled unknowns
and place essence within a greater frame
And if you existed as the ocean
my wish would be to live as its motion
And if you were born the sky's blueness true
then I would wish to be clouds touching you
Author notes
Challenge from Ashley.
Dedicated to her.
From the movie, "The Notebook" Noah says to Allie: 'If you’re a bird, I’m a bird.' OMG...hehe I want to watch the movie now. That is my favorite part...~sigh sigh~
No less than 7 lines.
A contest entry
- Love's Many Faces by Silly Rabbit..
600 points, ended May 22, 2008, 56 entries
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Comments
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I love the last two lines. So soft and yet sweet and adoring...
Wonderful job here. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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OMG!!! That is one of my alltime favourite movies!!!
This is so fantastic!! Wow.. what a luck girl she is having all these dedications to her!
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Considering this is my daughter's favorite movie and i think i have seen it through once but don't remember the whole thing, it was such a sad, touching story. your last 4 lines are so beautiful and touching and i see Ash loved it. nice job here hun
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no more than 7 lines huh????
7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 .... ??????
never seen that movie ~shaking head vigorously~ and don't plan on it (it's a romantic sappy thing isn't it?)
Second stanza is phenomenal ...
"For beneath epidermis is your name" and then it just gets better! damn, you really are good!
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........This was so beautiful!!! And the love you feel for her is conveyed wonderfully!!!! You both are blessed in each other!!! I hope she appreciates you 'cause I know my husband would never write me love notes never the less a poem about it!!! Very beautiful......
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Beautifully Weaved!
Bravo Bro.
-Timbo.
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omg I love that movie so much and this is Beautiful with a perfect ending!
sigh....
Your poetry is always so amazing!
Lynda
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Damn. You just made me cry, thanks for that! This is gorgeous Mark. Absolutely gorgeous. Yep, she's gonna love it.
I'm getting too old and cranky and cynical to feel these feelings anymore, how sad for me
I'm going to go and watch my favorite movie now, 300!!!
LOL
I mean hey, Smokin hot men running around in Speedo's and scarlet red capes..sigh...gotta love that!
(love to you, Ash),
Peace,
Jin
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first of all I must say that I absolutely love the movie The Notebook. I have seen it many times and I always cry through it. your poem is one of deepness, love and its from your heart. as I read through your poems these days, I feel very strong emotions of happiness. I am so glad that you are happy. love does strange things to people.
I am sure that she will love this poem that you have dedicated to her.
wonderful poem by dear brother, wonderful
kat
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Oooh... I love that movie!!. And this is sensational!!!!
such a sweet heart you have mark.
Delila
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BEAUTIFUL shes gonna love it
Redwing Spirit artsyfartsy
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