Here...
in my reclining bed of sorts.
Anything common place I will abort.
For this girl of latent improprieties,
takes waiting to be full of intimate anxieties.
But...
I have to use it now, most sparingly.
For there's a shoe that's waiting to fall, currently.
For you and I are both in-tuned and in-sync-finally.
And I have used most of my writer's ink, substantially.
Praytell...
Is this not a lover's swift caught dream?
to bind as one; toe to toe and seam to seam.
Upon clouds stretched out to bluest, newest perfection's flair.
Tell me, are we really here together? Flowing in loving care?
Judge...
me not harshly if I question much more than once or twice.
This may seem strange-but love often calls for 'sacrifice.'
I need to know if we're both riding the 'self-same' wave.
Before we escape and walk down streets that are paved.
For...
this may be a delusion of the highest degree.
Promising true, intrinsic love in its totality.
or, it may just be an underpaid and overworked mirage.
In which case we can park it outback in the garage.
Then settle for some ice cream, pie, and a foot massage.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quotes and Lots of Points...A contest. by JinSays.
5900 points, ended May 1, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Another of my favorites takes a prize! I must have excellent taste! *
*..congratulations on your Bronze.
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Thanks so much, and I second that - I would say you have good taste
lol
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Amazing!
Great write
Good luck!!
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Thanks buncheslol
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I see a Woman of the Twenties lounging on the Setee with a long black cigarette holder and whisp's of erotic smoke encircling her head.
this is one of the best works of poetry I have seen on here, I think it is the gold winner indeed, it plays out like a Fifties movie, nice job.
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Wow, you do say what you say so well, thankslol
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Grinning ear to ear from your "wrap up" end stanza..enjoyed this write to the fullest. Sounds like something Dorothy herself would have penned.
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Wow, I am honored...thanks
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Holy Smokes! This. Is. Wow. I'm. This. Thank you SO MUCH!
You've made my day!
Dorothy, she was truly one in a million. . .
Okay, I'ma blubbering, thank you for that too!
Jin -
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Wow, and you in term have made my day...thankslol
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I really do love this. It makes me happy to read it. =} Good luck on the contest and thank you.
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TY
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I love how this ended up! Wasn't quite expecting it but it works so well and I smiled as I read the last two lines. Great flow and rhythm in this. Good luck in the contest. Love, C
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Thanks so very muchlol
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I guess you're on quotation random, fabulous! I love writers that take the risk, and just jump!
Your quote is from:
(ticktickticktick-sound of the roulette wheel, a free service!). . .
My Hero!!!! (Imagine that!)
Mrs. Dorothy Parker,
"By the time you swear you're his
Shivering and sighing
And he vows his love is
Infinite, undying
Lady make a note of this
One of you is lying."
(Unfortunate Coincidence).
(I love love love this!). . .
If this doesn't work for you, please let me know, I'll be happy to spin the wheel again, just for you.
No word limit, no restriction. Let your muse flow.
Have fun, peace,
Jin
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